Talk:Keith Lindsay Stewart/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk · contribs) 02:06, 1 November 2016 (UTC)

Will come back shortly. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 02:06, 1 November 2016 (UTC)


 * Section 1; sentence 1; Consider deleting "the son of a bank manager", and add "His father was a bank manager". The former is a bit confusing.
 * Have revised. Zawed (talk) 08:44, 1 November 2016 (UTC)


 * Section 1; sentence 2; Link Napier Boys' High School and Wanganui Collegiate to their articles.
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 08:44, 1 November 2016 (UTC)


 * Section 1; In 1914, he entered the; "joined" would be a better alternative "entered".
 * With respect, I disagree. It is not appropriate to refer to "joining" a school. You would "join" a club or even the army, but you wouldn't join a school. You would enter school or university. Zawed (talk) 08:44, 1 November 2016 (UTC)


 * Section 1; "having passed the necessary entrance exams", may be replaced by "having cleared the entrance exams". Entrance exams are necessary, there is no need to again mentioned "necessary entrance exams".
 * Have deleted "necessary". Zawed (talk) 08:44, 1 November 2016 (UTC)


 * All the 2, 3, 4 Sections are ought to be put under Level 2 section "Military career". That would make them 2.1, 2.2, 2.3 respectively.
 * Have restructured. Zawed (talk) 08:44, 1 November 2016 (UTC)


 * Section "First World War"; "Most of his war was spent in Egypt" to be "Most of his war period was spent in Egypt", just "his war" has no meaning.
 * Have revised. Zawed (talk) 08:44, 1 November 2016 (UTC)


 * Section "Inter-war period"; Link "Ceylon Defence Force" completely not just Ceylon. Also link "South Island" in the same section.
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 08:44, 1 November 2016 (UTC)


 * Section "Second World War"; para 1; "appointed to Army Headquarters" is a bit awkward. Appoint used for some position, not a place. "transferred to Army Headquarters" would be fine.
 * Have revised. I used "posted" rather than "transferred" to avoid any connotation of a demotion. Zawed (talk) 08:44, 1 November 2016 (UTC)


 * Section "Second World War"; Revise the last but one sentence of para 1, it is a bit confusing.
 * Have revised, hope it is clearer now. Zawed (talk) 08:44, 1 November 2016 (UTC)


 * Section "Second World War"; para 1; Add "back" after "returned" in "Stewart returned to the 5th Infantry Brigade as its commander", because he once held the command of the brigade prior to this one.
 * With respect, I disagree. The use of "back" is redundant. He "returned" to the 5th Infantry Brigade because he commanded it previously. If it was his first time in command, I would have used "appointed commander" or similar. Zawed (talk) 08:44, 1 November 2016 (UTC)


 * Section "Later life"; sentence 1; A comma is needed after "Stewart retired from the military in 1954". Also "he was not rewarded with" would be better than just "was not rewarded with"
 * Done. Zawed (talk) 08:44, 1 November 2016 (UTC)
 * Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 07:08, 1 November 2016 (UTC)
 * Krishna (may I refer to you by that name?), thanks for the feedback on the article. There were a couple of points I disagreed with, but I have explained why. Thanks again. Zawed (talk) 08:44, 1 November 2016 (UTC)
 * Of course you can, always. Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 02:16, 3 November 2016 (UTC)


 * GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

Regards, Krishna Chaitanya Velaga (talk &bull;&#32;mail) 02:16, 3 November 2016 (UTC)
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