Talk:Kekal/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: 12george1 (talk) 05:04, 4 March 2011 (UTC)


 * Lede
 * "...Jakarta, Indonesia which according to Allmusic was one of the first heavy metal bands from Indonesia to make international inroads." - Try reading this phrase; wouldn't it read better if you added a comma after "Indonesia" and "Allmusic"? --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
 * "Through its career, the band has released 7 full length studio albums, 2 compilation albums, 2 demo tapes..." - All numbers less than 10 should be spelled-out (exceptions: if the number has to appear that way, such as the album "8"; or dates, such as January 1) --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Early years (formation to 2002)
 * Delink "extreme metal", as it is already linked in the lede  --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
 * "On June 1996, Azhar Sianturi joined Kekal..." - Change to "In June 1996" --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
 * International scene (2003-2006)
 * There is no citations for either paragraph --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Jeff's move to Canada (2006-2007)
 * Delink "Jeff Arwadi", since it is already wikilinked in the lede.  --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
 * No references on the last sentence of either paragraph    --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Departure of band members (2009)
 * "Shortly after, Kekal put up an offer of 3 albums..." - Remember, spell-out numbers less than 10  --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
 * The last sentence of the second paragraph is unreferenced  --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Style
 * Move the audio clip of "Our Urban Industry Runs Monotonously" to the top of the section, and not in a random spot within the text, because this part of the following sentence: "The band’s well received fifth album, Acidity, mixed black metal and double bass drum blasts with progressive metal, progressive rock," and the other part: "classic rock, jazz, and ambient styles which led to the band being labeled “avant-garde,..." look like there on two separate paragraphs.   --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Delink: "1000 Thoughts of Violence", "progressive metal", and "The Habit of Fire" --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Songwriting and recording techniques
 * Delink: "The Painful Experience", "jazz", and "The Habit of Fire" --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Kekal and DIY ethic
 * No reference on that last sentence  --Moved sentence, might still need ref.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Former members
 * There is no reference for the following people: Leo Setiawan, Harry, Newbabe, and Yeris. --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Guest musicians
 * Again, no references, on the following people: Kenny Cheong, Jason DeRon, Doctor D, Hana, and Vera. --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Discography
 * Only referenced on "Covered in Filth: A Tribute to Cradle of Filth - 2003" and "elf Krusher compilation: 5th Anniversary THT Productions - 2001"  --Done.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
 * References
 * Be consistent with the dates; on ref #1 there is "March 14, 1999", but on ref #32 it says "10 April - 2004". --Will do.--3family6 (talk) 14:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Summary
 * Good job on improving the article, I will now be passing it for GA. Congratulations, --12george1 (talk) 15:52, 4 March 2011 (UTC)