Talk:Kelan Martin/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 09:10, 14 November 2017 (UTC)

Going to review this article. MWright96 (talk) 09:10, 14 November 2017 (UTC)


 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * Think the lead could do with a expansion to summarise his whole career.

Early life

 * Wikilink points, rebounds and three-point range since they are basketball jargon that need understanding by non-basketball readers of the article.
 * "Kenneth was on the state championship team at Louisville’s Ballard High School in Louisville and won a NCAA Division II championship at Kentucky Wesleyan." - remove the second mention of Louisville since you have already established the city is where the school is based. Also add the appropriate wikilink for NCAA Division II basketall
 * "He quit football as a sophomore" - He stopped playing football as a sophomore
 * "The Bruins were ranked number 1" - Number 1 should be spelt out per MOS:NUMERAL
 * "including the deciding 3-pointer" - same issue as the point above

Freshman

 * "in a 74-66 upset of fifth-ranked North Carolina" - over

Sophomore

 * Explain what double-doubles mean
 * "he lost some weight and attended an Adidas-sponsored camp" - I don't believe the sponsor of the camp is relevant. Thus, it should be written as an training camp
 * "On the season," - change to Over the course of the season,
 * "He was marred by a slump at the end of the season." - Was it a slump of form? If so, please change this for non-basketball readers.

Junior

 * Change the two mentions of Big East player of the week to as Big East Player of the Week
 * "and dished out four assists" - "dished out" is not encyclopedic language
 * "All‐District 5 Second Team. on" - remove the period between "Team" and "on"
 * "Martin did an internship with a TV station" - better, Martin undertook an internship with the TV station
 * Wikilink Julius Erving Award, WTHR and the NBA Draft; the third of which should be specifically linked to 2017 NBA Draft

Overall you've made a good effort but I'm putting this on hold until the changes have been implemented. MWright96 (talk) 21:29, 14 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Looks like the nominator hasn't edited since July. WikiOriginal-9 (talk) 02:46, 22 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Hello, I decided to take over editing the page since the nominator hasn't edited in the past four months. I have taken care of the issues pointed out here in order for it to be considered for GA status, but if its too late because of the 7 day hold period already being passed, I understand. DepressedPer (talk) 15:51, 27 November 2017 (UTC)