Talk:Kenny Williams (basketball, born 1972)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: LunaEatsTuna (talk · contribs) 05:41, 1 August 2023 (UTC)

Heyo! I'll review this tomorrow (2 August UTC).  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 05:41, 1 August 2023 (UTC)
 * There we go! Short but sweet. On hold.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 19:29, 2 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Awesome work! Passing another great article.  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 16:36, 18 August 2023 (UTC)

Copyvio check
Earwig says good to go.

Prose

 * Wikilink basketball in the lead as is standard for basketball player articles.
 * O.K.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 04:46, 15 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "At Lyons, Williams" – Lyons? Also:
 * Now "At Lyons High School, Williams"-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:05, 16 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Recommend opening with his full name as it is his first mention in the body.
 * Now "At Lyons High School, Kenny Williams"-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:07, 16 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "His senior season team got off to a 9–1 start" – recommend "His senior season team commenced with a 9–1 start" for better wording.
 * Thx.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:09, 16 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "He committed to UIC" – change to "He committed to the University of Illinois Chicago (UIC)" and unlink and abbreviate its mention in § College.
 * Done-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:12, 16 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "surpassing Chuck Lambert" – do we know what year/date Lambert set the record?
 * Added from the WP:IC.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:14, 16 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Wikilink Summit League as first mention in the lead.
 * OK.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:16, 16 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "and is the All-time Flames leader in steals (237)" – recommend "and is the All-time Flames leader in steals with 237" in this context for better flow.
 * done-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:17, 16 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "was second in the MCC" – MCC?
 * I think I corrected this correctly.-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:20, 16 August 2023 (UTC)
 * "along with Kenny Battle, Rickey Green, and Sonny Parker to name a few" – eh, do we really need to name them?
 * His notability is modest, so I am throwing in a few blue links to show people who were of a similar stature. Heck, the sources include the names so why not.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:22, 16 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Sounds good!  ツ LunaEatsTuna  (💬)— 16:36, 18 August 2023 (UTC)
 * The lose sentences in § Professional career can definitely be combined to form some longer paragraphs.
 * Done.--TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:23, 16 August 2023 (UTC)

Refs
Passes spotcheck on refs 5 (useable for sports reporting per WP:NYPOST), 11, 12 and 25.

Others

 * In external links, capitalise the 'c' in college stats.
 * done-TonyTheTiger (T / C / WP:FOUR / WP:CHICAGO / WP:WAWARD) 23:18, 16 August 2023 (UTC)