Talk:Key House/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Bruxton (talk · contribs) 16:22, 5 March 2024 (UTC)

Review
I am happy to review this article.Bruxton (talk) 16:22, 5 March 2024 (UTC)
 * I think I have completed the review and I await your edits and response. Bruxton (talk) 22:31, 5 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Thank you. I will be traveling tomorrow so if we have a delay I will not get back to the nomination until the 18th. Bruxton (talk) 18:35, 6 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Sorry for the delay, I've had real life events keeping me occupied. I'll work on this today. APK hi :-)  ( talk ) 19:32, 13 March 2024 (UTC)
 * Ok, I think all of your concerns have been addressed. By the way, thanks for taking the time to review the article. APK hi :-)  ( talk ) 20:37, 13 March 2024 (UTC)

Lead

 * Consider adding a
 * "The house is where Key left in September 1814 to retrieve a kidnapped doctor during the War of 1812" consider "In September 1814 Key left this house to retrieve a kidnapped doctor during the War of 1812" or something that reads better?
 * The lead presents a good summary of the article and all of the information is repeated and cited in the body
 * The lead presents a good summary of the article and all of the information is repeated and cited in the body
 * The lead presents a good summary of the article and all of the information is repeated and cited in the body

Grammar

 * the kitchen and dining room.. might be extra puncuation
 * "destruction to the area when British attacked the nation's capital" British probably needs a determiner "the"
 * "Key learnt of a doctor" might be better to use American English because the subject is American
 * "renamed the The Star-Spangled Banner," extra determiner
 * "great-grandon" spelling
 * "The Key House in 1931 showing the drastic" consider shows
 * "Key-Smith said" should be followed by a comma
 * " offered the suggestion of" consider replacing with just "suggested"
 * "approximately 5O per cent" percent should be one word - and 50 may be using a letter "o"?
 * "NPS historian Barry Mackintosh said" should be followed by a comma
 * "said to be two-feet (0.6 m) thick while interior walls were eighteen-inches (46 cm) thick." consider 2 ft and 18 in
 * "floorplan" for this use should probably be two words
 * "fell far short of the $25,000 goal" consider an inflation template
 * {ok}} Same as above "at a cost of $100,000"
 * Same as above "In 1948, Congress approved $65,00"
 * It is not a must but you can consider adding these templates to dollar figures. I find them interesting
 * "Perched on a slope beside the Potomac River, the house was three-and-a-half stories tall facing the river, with the façade being two-and-a-half stories" consider "The home was perched on a slope beside the Potomac River. It was three-and-a-half stories tall and it faced the river; the façade was two-and-a-half stories
 * "In addition to his work in law," consider in addition to his legal work or similar
 * "Beanes, that had been arrested by British troops" consider "who had been"
 * "renamed the The Star-Spangled Banner, which is the national anthem of the United States" consider "which later became the national anthem of the United States"
 * "argued for the defense of slavery" consider "in defense"
 * "he left the public spotlight" seems colloquial consider "left public life"
 * "After Key's death in 1843" to avoid repetition consider "In the years following Key's death in 1843" or similar
 * "by his heirs for around ten years" can we nail down a specific time?
 * "Due to its location in an undesirable area at the time" this line seems clumsy and inexact, consider rewriting
 * "altered the Key House's appearance" consider rewrite to "altered the appearance of the Key House"
 * "Amongst the donated items" We should use American English as mentioned above
 * "The plan was to demolish it all" the language here is inexact, consider being specific
 * "but after a local outcry about saving" here outcry seems colloquial and not encyclopedic
 * "raising funds to restore the house fell far short" fell far short, consider more exact encyclopedic language
 * "The Key House was a brick colonial that was two-and-a-half stories" consider "and" instead of "that"
 * "Perched on a slope beside the Potomac River, the house was three-and-a-half stories tall facing the river, with the façade being two-and-a-half stories" consider "The home was perched on a slope beside the Potomac River. It was three-and-a-half stories tall and it faced the river; the façade was two-and-a-half stories
 * "In addition to his work in law," consider in addition to his legal work or similar
 * "Beanes, that had been arrested by British troops" consider "who had been"
 * "renamed the The Star-Spangled Banner, which is the national anthem of the United States" consider "which later became the national anthem of the United States"
 * "argued for the defense of slavery" consider "in defense"
 * "he left the public spotlight" seems colloquial consider "left public life"
 * "After Key's death in 1843" to avoid repetition consider "In the years following Key's death in 1843" or similar
 * "by his heirs for around ten years" can we nail down a specific time?
 * "Due to its location in an undesirable area at the time" this line seems clumsy and inexact, consider rewriting
 * "altered the Key House's appearance" consider rewrite to "altered the appearance of the Key House"
 * "Amongst the donated items" We should use American English as mentioned above
 * "The plan was to demolish it all" the language here is inexact, consider being specific
 * "but after a local outcry about saving" here outcry seems colloquial and not encyclopedic
 * "raising funds to restore the house fell far short" fell far short, consider more exact encyclopedic language
 * "The Key House was a brick colonial that was two-and-a-half stories" consider "and" instead of "that"
 * "by his heirs for around ten years" can we nail down a specific time?
 * "Due to its location in an undesirable area at the time" this line seems clumsy and inexact, consider rewriting
 * "altered the Key House's appearance" consider rewrite to "altered the appearance of the Key House"
 * "Amongst the donated items" We should use American English as mentioned above
 * "The plan was to demolish it all" the language here is inexact, consider being specific
 * "but after a local outcry about saving" here outcry seems colloquial and not encyclopedic
 * "raising funds to restore the house fell far short" fell far short, consider more exact encyclopedic language
 * "The Key House was a brick colonial that was two-and-a-half stories" consider "and" instead of "that"
 * "The plan was to demolish it all" the language here is inexact, consider being specific
 * "but after a local outcry about saving" here outcry seems colloquial and not encyclopedic
 * "raising funds to restore the house fell far short" fell far short, consider more exact encyclopedic language
 * "The Key House was a brick colonial that was two-and-a-half stories" consider "and" instead of "that"
 * "raising funds to restore the house fell far short" fell far short, consider more exact encyclopedic language
 * "The Key House was a brick colonial that was two-and-a-half stories" consider "and" instead of "that"
 * "The Key House was a brick colonial that was two-and-a-half stories" consider "and" instead of "that"

Images

 * File:Key House 1931.jpg is a non free and the summary and license seems incomplete. I updated it with appropriate language
 * There are 9 images in the article and the other ones are properly licensed
 * There are 9 images in the article and the other ones are properly licensed

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