Talk:Khadeen Carrington/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 16:27, 8 June 2018 (UTC)

Going to review this article. MWright96 (talk) 16:27, 8 June 2018 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * "He competed in college basketball for Seton Hall. The son of Reynold Carrington, a former professional soccer player and coach, Khadeen starred at Bishop Loughlin Memorial High School in Brooklyn, New York. " - reword this section to The son of former professional soccer player and coach Reynold Carrington, he competed in college basketball for Seton Hall Pirates and later starred at Bishop Loughlin Memorial High School in Brooklyn, New York.
 * I have reworded this, but not to your version since he played at Seton Hall after Bishop Loughlin. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 01:06, 9 June 2018 (UTC)
 * "As a senior, he led the CHSAA's" - write out the full name of the CHSAA and put the acroynms in parentheses
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 01:07, 9 June 2018 (UTC)
 * "and was named the Brooklyn boys player of the year by the New York Daily News." - Brookyn Boys' Player of the Year by New York Daily News.
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 01:08, 9 June 2018 (UTC)

Early life and high school career

 * Italize New York Post since it's a published print source
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 01:09, 9 June 2018 (UTC)
 * "Carrington competed in AAU play with the New York Lightning" - AAU should be spelt out as Amateur Athletic Union and wikilinked
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 01:10, 9 June 2018 (UTC)
 * "He was named the Brooklyn boys player of the year by the New York Daily News." - Same issue as the third one in the lead section
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 01:11, 9 June 2018 (UTC)
 * Catholic High School Athletic Association Player should be moved to the first time its acroynms are mentioned and all other mentions thereafter should be written out as acroynms
 * I think I got this. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 01:12, 9 June 2018 (UTC)
 * State who Kevin Willard is
 * Changed to "Seton Hall coach Kevin Willard." ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 01:13, 9 June 2018 (UTC)

College career

 * "Carrington was able to flash his potential" - demonstrate
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 01:14, 9 June 2018 (UTC)
 * "from the field and 38.2 percent from 3-point range." - three-point range
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 01:15, 9 June 2018 (UTC)
 * "In the NCAA tournament loss against Arkansas," - wikilink NCAA Tournament to 2017 NCAA Division I Men's Basketball Tournament
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 01:16, 9 June 2018 (UTC)
 * "Carrington led the Pirates to their first NCAA Tournament victory" - link NCAA tournament to 2018 NCAA Division I Men's Basketball Tournament
 * Done. ~ EDDY  ( talk / contribs ) ~ 01:17, 9 June 2018 (UTC)