Talk:Khalid ibn al-Walid/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Pyrotec (talk) 17:30, 4 July 2010 (UTC)
 * I will review. Pyrotec (talk) 17:30, 4 July 2010 (UTC)

Initial comments
Sorry for the delay in getting to this stage. I've now read the article (quickly) a couple of times and I've formed the impression that its about GA-level, possibly on its way to being a WP:FAC; but this review will only be considering it as a WP:GAN. There is at least one phrase that I don't like; but it seems to be well referenced and well-illustrated so I don't expect there will be too many problems.

Tomorrow, I will start the detailed review, but leaving the WP:Lead until last. At this stage I will be mostly concentrating on "problems", so I might not have much to comment on - but we will see. Pyrotec (talk) 21:00, 9 July 2010 (UTC)


 * Thanks for the comments..

الله أكبر Mohammad Adil  18:32, 10 July 2010 (UTC)


 * Early life -
 * Just a statement of curiosity. The desert is described as: "clear, dry and unpolluted air": perhaps so but there could be dust and sand storms.


 * Muhammad's era (610–632) -
 * Looks OK.


 * Abu Bakr's era (632–634) -
 * Conquest of Arabia -
 * ✅ Pyrotec (talk) 21:20, 12 July 2010 (UTC) - In ".... Khalid defeated Tulaiha,[26] a main rebel leader who claimed prophethood as a means to draw support for himself. His power was crushed after his remaining followers were defeated at the Battle of Ghamra.[24] Kalid ....", I assume that "His" referes to Tulaiha. Perhaps "His" could be replaced by Tulaiha?

....to be continued. Pyrotec (talk) 20:43, 10 July 2010 (UTC)


 * Well in early life section, "clear" not clear in the sense that you can see clear blue sky ... it has been used to describe the environmental conditions.

I have replaced "his" with "tulaiha", as it may creates confusions for new readers. الله أكبر Mohammad Adil  21:13, 10 July 2010 (UTC)
 * Thanks. Pyrotec (talk) 21:12, 12 July 2010 (UTC)


 * Sorry, my geography is not too good in this area, is "state of Madinah" a typo (Madina appears eslewhere)?


 * Invasion of Persian Empire & Invasion of Eastern Roman Empire -
 * These two subsections look OK.

....to be continued. Pyrotec (talk) 21:20, 12 July 2010 (UTC)


 * State of Madinah refers to the small state created during the time of Prophet Mohammad. Madinah is the alternative spelling of Madina, as the spelling format should be same, so i have corrected it now as "state of Madina"

الله أكبر Mohammad Adil  17:05, 13 July 2010 (UTC)


 * Thanks. Pyrotec (talk) 19:46, 13 July 2010 (UTC)


 * Caliph Umar's era (634–642) -
 * Conquest of Central Levant -
 * I think a unit of measurement is missing after 50 in this sentence: "Soon after the appointment of Abu-Ubaidah as commander in chief, he sent a small detachment to the annual fair held at Abu-al-Quds, modern day Abla, near Zahle 50 east of Beirut."
 * In the same paragraph, I suggest that "it" is clarified (its probably the force, not the garrison): "Before it would have been completely destroyed, Abu Ubaidah, having received new intelligence ...."

Pyrotec (talk) 20:02, 13 July 2010 (UTC)


 * Stopping at this point. It a GA. Pyrotec (talk) 20:02, 13 July 2010 (UTC)

Overall summary
GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose quality:
 * B. MoS compliance:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. References to sources:
 * B. Citation of reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

I'm awarding this article GA-status. I beleive that it could make WP:FAC, but submitting to WP:PR first would help in identifying any areas of grammar that might to be improved. Congratulations on producing an informative historical article. Pyrotec (talk) 20:02, 13 July 2010 (UTC)