Talk:Khalji Revolution/GA2

GA Review
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Nominator: 22:20, 23 January 2024 (UTC)

Reviewer: Kimikel (talk · contribs) 03:13, 16 July 2024 (UTC) Hello, I'm going to be taking over this review as part of the July GA backlog drive. I'll likely be done with my review within a few days.


 * @Noorullah21 Thank you for your very prompt responses. I've gone through and given the article a second look, and I see nothing left to address before this article hits GA quality. Congratulations and thank you for your work; this was one of the more interesting topics I've read about in a GA review thus far! Kimikel (talk) 02:31, 18 July 2024 (UTC)

Below is my initial review; this was an interesting read but has a few small issues to fix before GA status. Please see and consider the following suggestions, and if you have questions on any just let me know:

Well-written

 * I agree with the comment left by DeepstoneV. The Mamluks were Turkic; they did not originate from the country of Turkey. Therefore, the phrase "Turkic" should be used in place of "Turkish", even if the sources use the word "Turkish".

Fixed.

Lead

 * Replace "demise" with "death"
 * "Neglectful of governance," > A poor governor,

Background

 * "Muhammad of Ghor" > not wikilinked to Muhammad of Ghor, who does have a page
 * "the Mamluks rose to power" > how? when? doesn't have to be a whole paragraph, just a brief description of when and through what means they rose to power.
 * "rival Amirs" > rival amirs
 * "debauchery but"> debauchery, but
 * "Delaying his departure"> After he delayed his departure,
 * "secretly permitted by" > secretly permitted to do so by
 * "nobles, opposed to Jalaluddin's" > nobles opposed Jalaluddin's
 * "Qaiqabad, paralyzed under unknown circumstances, initiated" > Under unknown circumstances, Qaiqabad was paralyzed, initiating

Revolution

 * "nobles, with Jalaluddin at the top, whom they intended to put to death" > nobles which they intended to kill, with Jalaluddin at the top.
 * "Amirs" > amirs

Verifiable

 * Bibliography sources should be listed in chronological order, with the oldest first.
 * "A. L. Srivastava" should be listed as Srivastava, A.L.
 * The "Unesco" source seems to have the authors Asimov, Muhammad Seyfeydinovich, and Bosworth, Clifford Edmund:

Spot check:

 * Chaurasia 2002, p. 28.: Verified
 * Mehta 1979, pp. 76–91.: Does mention Balban's ascent to the throne, but does not mention Balban strengthening the Delhi Sultanate within the pages listed.
 * Mahajan 2007, p. 121.: Verified
 * Bowman 2000, p. 267.: Verified
 * Asher & Hambly 1994.: Verified, although publish date should be changed to 21 November 2011 (its last update, according to the bottom of the article). Also add a retrieval date since it's a website

Broad

 * Issues with lack of background raised in first GA review have been addressed in my opinion; with limited knowledge on this subject, I was able to follow the events easily. Article is broad in coverage

Neutral

 * No issues with neutrality

Images

 * All appropriately licensed and benefit article

Stable
Kimikel (talk) 23:05, 17 July 2024 (UTC)
 * No issues with stability

Fixed all of the above. Noorullah (talk) 00:41, 18 July 2024 (UTC)