Talk:Khaya Majola (cricketer)

Pair of eyes request
I wonder if you would be so kind as to have a look over this before I move it into mainspace? I wouldn't normally be so cautious, but I've very wary of the subject matter, and that it is easy to go badly wrong with it. I'm not after a detailed copy-edit at this stage, as I still have polishing work to do on it, and some searching around for additional content (especially in the post-apartheid section). I am most after input on the overall balance, how I have dealt with the apartheid issues, and the section headings, which I'm not keen on. I know this isn't really your normal area of expertise, but your input is always very balanced and well reasoned. Any help appreciated. Harrias talk 15:13, 30 December 2019 (UTC)


 * Flattery will get you everywhere. I have bravely resisted a strong urge to copy edit . (Your meaning is always clear, but as you comment, it could do with some "polishing".)


 * 1) The lead could mention when apartheid/the boycott ended.
 * 2) "Before he left for England, Majola made two appearances in what became known as the Howa Bowl" Some information on the racial make-up of these teams would be helpful.
 * 3) "often were not served drinks at the cricket clubs the matches were played at" For legal reasons, club rules, or a discretionary decision by club stewards on the day? An idea of what proportion of clubs did serve black players would be helpful, if available.
 * 4) "the South African government was forced to unban the African National Congress (ANC)" A bit of background, if only in footnotes, as to what "forced" the government, and what the ANC was/is may be appropriate.
 * 5) "As part of the ANC's efforts to unify South Africa" Why and how is the ANC doing this? Yes, I know, but a reader may not.
 * 6) Suggestion: give some figures for non-white participation in SA cricket when Majola died and today - ideally both across the country and in terms of the national team.


 * Off the top of my head, re section titles, don't try to cram so much in. Maybe:
 * Playing career
 * International matches
 * Domestic career
 * Sport activist


 * or some such?


 * The overall balance and presentation seems fine and neutral. As you can probably tell by the fact that I have only come up with nit picks above. A nice article which seems most of the way there. I hope that this helps. Gog the Mild (talk) 16:03, 30 December 2019 (UTC)

Howa Bowl
The Howa Bowl article states that it was a competition limited to non-white players. If this is correct, can it be described as a 'non-racial tournament' in the introduction here? Dalliance (talk) 13:31, 23 January 2020 (UTC)