Talk:Kid Klown in Crazy Chase/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ( talk ) 15:03, 19 March 2011 (UTC)

Initial comments: -- Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ( talk ) 15:28, 19 March 2011 (UTC)
 * References:
 * What makes Nintendo Life a reliable source?
 * Well, I viewed in the discussion of its usability that Guyinblack25 found some mentions in reliable sources as well as having an editorial policy. I usually don't use Nintendo Life if I intend to make an article a good article; however, I make exceptions when there are limited sources available, or if Nintendo Life provides unique coverage such as interviews that don't exist elsewhere. I will take it down for now, though I'm definitely going to reinvigorate the discussion - it'd be nice to get some finality on the issue.
 * Coverage:
 * There's enough coverage to pass as a good article; all aspects of the game are covered to some degree, although real development would be nice.
 * I've looked around, and unfortunately, no development info seems to exist outside of release and delays that I am aware of.
 * Prose:
 * The prose is exceedingly choppy in areas. The biggest issues are run-on sentences, comma splices, and unclear subject/object. I've taken a stab at cleaning some of them, but here are a few more:
 * "However, in retrospect, publications such as IGN called it a game with merit to it." → This is an odd way to close the lead, and it's also not mentioned in the body.
 * Removed.
 * "Kid Klown automatically runs down a path with various obstacles in his way, with the objective being stopping a fuse from reaching a powder keg. " Where possible, removing "ing" constructions will make the text much tighter and easier to read.
 * I think that I kept only the necessary "ing" constructions, hopefully.
 * The "Development and release" has almost every sentence begin with "It" or a variation thereof.
 * I attempted to reduce this; are the changes acceptable?
 * Everything in reception should be in past tense, in "Nintendo Life's Andrew Donaldson commented that while not a bad game, there's no reason to play it due to a lack of levels and an abundance of games that do what it does better.", you're switching from past to present.
 * Removed Nintendo Life and hopefully replaced any offending tense errors.
 * Misc.
 * does not seem to support everything in the gameplay paragraph, in particular the number of original levels, how much content was added, etc.
 * Can the game's contents be used as the reference? If not, I will remove, as I cannot even find the level count in any reliable source (not even sure how I came up with it anymore; must have misread it).
 * If you had the game manual I'd imagine that would be a suitably verifiable reference. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ( talk ) 14:10, 20 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Removed the offending statement. - The New Age Retro Hippie used Ruler! Now, he can figure out the length of things easily. 23:23, 20 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Uh, which one? Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ( talk ) 00:08, 22 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Sorry, I was referring to the number of levels featured in the Super NES version. - The New Age Retro Hippie used Ruler! Now, he can figure out the length of things easily. 00:39, 22 March 2011 (UTC)
 * Oh, ok. I'll take another look at the article later today.  Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ( talk ) 11:58, 22 March 2011 (UTC)
 * FYI- Here's the discussion about Nintendo Life for easy access. (Guyinblack25 talk 13:48, 22 March 2011 (UTC))


 * Alright, I'm ready to pass--with the link provided I have no major issues if the Nintendo Life source is added back in or not at this point. Der Wohltemperierte Fuchs ( talk ) 17:21, 22 March 2011 (UTC)