Talk:Kiki Cuyler/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 20:56, 11 January 2020 (UTC)

Going to take a look at this one. MWright96 (talk) 20:56, 11 January 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Early life

 * "Cuyler was born in Harrisville, Michigan, on August 30, 1898,[3][1]" - refs should be in numerical order - Done Hamma085 (talk) 14:01, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "George had lived and played semipro baseball" - more formal; semi-professional - Done Hamma085 (talk) 14:01, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "He played for the Buick plant baseball team and played in the Industrial League" - try to avoid reptition of the same word in the same sentence - Done Hamma085 (talk) 14:01, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "Cuyler grew into a star athlete" - not so sure that the word "star" is appropriate in this instance. Please use a more neutral word - Done, split into two sentences as it ran on a bit. Hamma085 (talk) 14:01, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * Link batting average and triples to the relevant articles for those unfamiliar with baseball - Done Hamma085 (talk) 14:01, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "The Bay City Wolves, of the Michigan-Ontario League, signed Cuyler to a contract in 1920, and in that season he had a batting average of .317 and compiled 16 triples, in September of that year his contract was purchased by the Pittsburgh Pirates." - split this portion of text into three sentences rather than one overly long run-on sentence - Done Hamma085 (talk) 14:01, 12 January 2020 (UTC)

Career

 * Hyphens used in all scores stated in the article should be replaced with en dashes I believe I got all of them Hamma085 (talk) 15:25, 12 January 2020 (UTC)

Pittsburgh Pirates

 * "He was promoted to the Pirates for his first full major league season in 1924,[12] he played a platoon outfield position, splitting time with Carson Bigbee." - either use a period or a semicolon to split this sentence into two - Done Hamma085 (talk) 14:23, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "in a 16-4 win over the Philadelphia Phillies. At the end of the season he had a batting average of .354, and scored 94 runs and stolen 32 bases in only 117 games played." - Fleitz's book does not mention this but the Cuyler's Game Logs from 1924 as recorded by Baseball Reference does. I suggest moving the 1924 Baseball Reference citation to the end of this particular section of text - Done Hamma085 (talk) 14:09, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "the Pirates won the seventh game with a score of 9-7." - this sentence is not cited and will require the use of Fleitz's book to verify the information - Done Hamma085 (talk) 14:09, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "This was the first and only time Cuyler would win a World Series." - same issue as above - Done, used baseball reference page
 * "the very compact baseball stadium in Philadelphia.[17][14]" - refs should be in numerical order - Done, there were more that were not in order and I fixed those. Hamma085 (talk) 14:09, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "In April 1926 Paul Waner joined the Pirates" - How about moving the words "In April 1926" to the end of this text for variety - done Hamma085 (talk) 14:09, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "The middle of the 1926 season was a turning point for Cuyler and the team," - think maybe remove "1926" since the year is mentioned two sentences prior - Done Hamma085 (talk) 14:23, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * Link stolen bases and doubles to the correct articles for readers not familiar with baseball - Added link to stolen base earlier in article Hamma085 (talk) 14:23, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "The result of the vote was 18-6 in favor of keeping Clarke," the vote result is not mentioned by SABR; another source is required to verify the information - Done, another Sabr article mentions it and I've linked that one. Hamma085 (talk) 14:23, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "Cuyler was traded to the Chicago Cubs for Sparky Adams and Pete Scott." - it would help to briefly mention the positions of Adams and Scott. - Done, they played maybe outfield or infield positions and linked those articles. Hamma085 (talk) 14:23, 12 January 2020 (UTC)

Chicago Cubs and later career

 * "who was coached by Cuyler when he was coaching the 1949 Boston Red Sox," - this change is more compact and eliminates uncessary reptition who Cuyler coached at the 1949 Boston Red Sox, - Done Hamma085 (talk) 15:12, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "The following year was another successful year for Cuyler," - an improvement; The following year was also successful for Cuyler: - Done Hamma085 (talk) 15:12, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "he collected over 200 hits for the third time in his career, it would also be the" - and it - Done Hamma085 (talk) 15:12, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "After a poor performance in the first half of the 1935 season, where he hit .268," - The Brooklyn Eagle does not mention any of this text; SABR and Cuyler's generalized Baseball Reference citation does though. I suggest using those sources to verify the information added both to the section of where he hit .268, the brooklyn eagle cites the release of Cuyler by the cubs
 * "The next season was a bounce back season" - try to avoid wording such as "bounce back" because it is informal - Cuyler was healthy the next season, Hamma085 (talk) 15:22, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "Cuyler got struck down by injury again," - similar issue to the query above - Suffered another injury
 * Link free agent and spring training for non-Sports readers - Done Hamma085 (talk) 15:22, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "He started 58 games in 1938 for the Dodgers, and was released on September 16 of that year, he was signed as a coach for the rest of the season." - this is a run-on sentence. Split it into two, preferably start the second when it mentions Cuyler was signed as a coach - done Hamma085 (talk) 15:22, 12 January 2020 (UTC)

Later life and legacy

 * "While ice fishing in Glennie, Michigan on February 2, 1950 he suffered a heart attack." - how about He suffered a heart attack while ice fishing in Glennie, Michigan on February 2, 1950. - Done Hamma085 (talk) 15:06, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "and when it worsened he was sent to a hospital in Ann Arbor, Michigan, but died on the way" - better and more compact in Ann Arbor; he died en route|undefined - Done [[User:Hamma085|Hamma085 (talk) 15:06, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "His remains are interred in Saint Anne Cemetery in Harrisville Township, Michigan." - this sentence is uncited and will require a reliable source to verify the information - Done Hamma085 (talk) 15:06, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "stated the Cuyler was "A model on and off the field"" - that Cuyler was "a model on an off the field".}} - Done Hamma085 (talk) 15:06, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * "Cuyler's son Harold opened a restaurant after his fathers" - typo; should be worded as father's - Done Hamma085 (talk) 15:06, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * Italize The Sporting News to reflect it was a print publication at the time - Done Hamma085 (talk) 15:06, 12 January 2020 (UTC)
 * It would help to very briefly explain who Lawrence Ritter and Donald Honig - Removed reference of both authors and the book as I could not find a mention of Cuyler within it. Hamma085 (talk) 15:06, 12 January 2020 (UTC)