Talk:Killian Hayes/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:12, 6 April 2020 (UTC)

Will review this article as part of the GAN Backlog Drive of April to May 2020. MWright96 (talk) 13:12, 6 April 2020 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
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Lead

 * "but grew up in France due to his father's professional career." - Delink France per MOS:OVERLINK
 * "He debuted for Cholet's senior team at age 16 before efore receiving regular playing time in the following season." - the word denoted in bold should be deleted

Early life and career

 * Wikilink points, assists and steals to their respective articles on the first time they are mentioned in the article
 * "and often playing pick-up games in Lakeland and Orlando, Florida in the summer." - don't use seasons per MOS:SEASON
 * "Hayes watched highlights on YouTube," - highlights of basketball games on
 * Wikilink college basketball
 * "sharing MVP honors with Addison Patterson," - spell out MVP on its first mention in the prose and put the acronyms in parentheses

Cholet (2017–2019)

 * "After his team was last-place in its league early in the season," - last place is not hyphenated
 * "At 2019 NBA All-Star Weekend in Charlotte, North Carolina in February, he competed at the Basketball Without Borders camp." - clarify that it was Hayes' second time at the camp

ratiopharm Ulm (2019–present)

 * "six assists and eight turnovers in a win over Rasta Vechta." - Südwestrundfunk does not state that Hayes had eight turnovers in that game
 * "chipping in eight points, nine assists and three steals" - try not to use wording such as "chipping in"
 * "He recorded 20 points, 10 assists and four rebounds on 11 February in a 112–106 overtime loss to Alba Berlin." - the phrase "on 11 February" can be moved to the end of this sentence
 * Also, the EuroHoops citation attached to the sentence above doesn't mention that Hayes had four rebounds in this particular game

National team career

 * Delink Argentina per MOS:OVERLINK
 * "he received a six-game suspension by the French Federation of Basketball" - reword this sentence so it passes WP:LIMITED since it is too close to the EuroHoops source that is used to verify it

Player profile

 * "although he is not regarded as an extraordinary athlete." - regarded by whom exactly?

Personal life

 * "Hayes is the son of Sandrine (née Demiannay) and DeRon Hayes. He has an American father, DeRon Hayes" - this text should be shortened to mention his father only once
 * Delink the second mention of Cholet