Talk:Klallamornis/GA1

GA Review
The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.''

Reviewer: SilverTiger12 (talk · contribs) 17:24, 15 August 2023 (UTC)

Hey, I'll take this review. As a beginning note, there are many duplinks throughout the article. And there's a stray citation in the lede.

I'll come back to this soon, but my initial thoughts after reviewing the lede are that this really needs a copyedit. And the Description section later on seems sparse. It needs more description of the shape and size. --SilverTiger12 (talk) 17:24, 15 August 2023 (UTC)
 * Lede:
 * This genus included the largest North American plotopterids. This sentence is redundant to During its existence, Klallamornis was the largest plotopterid on the North American continent., and I find that second sentence poorly phrased. The genus still exists, it just isn't extant.
 * The second paragraph is too short. Say a bit more about what they looked like: feathers, beak, size and weight estimates. It needn't be in much detail, but all you currently say is that they're superficially like penguins.
 * The genus has a complicated taxonomy; of the three species published, two of them, K. buchanani and K. abyssa might be synonymous. K. buchanani was only recently assigned to the genus, and was referred until 2021 to the related genus Tonsala. ?K. clarki is only tentatively referred to the genus. One of the specimens assigned to ?K. clarki, generally nicknamed "Whiskey Creek plotopterid" in earlier paper after the locality where it was discovered, might be the oldest known plotopterid, dating as far back than the Priabonian. -> "The genus has a complicated taxonomy: of the three species assigned to Klallamornis, two-K. abyssa and K. buchanani-might be synonymous, and ?K. clarki is only tentatively assigned to the genus. K. buchanani was originally described as part of Tonsala, and was only re-assigned to Klallamornis in 2021; its few differences from K. abyssa have been attributed to sexual dimorphism by some researchers. One of the specimens assigned to ?K. clarki, generally nicknamed the "Whiskey Creek plotopterid" in earlier papers, might be the oldest known plotopterid, dating as far back as the Priabonian."
 * Klallamornis appeared during a period of global cooling, marked by the apparition of kelp forests in the North Pacific and a renewal in volcanism along the coast of the Pacific Northwest, creating a chain of volcanic islands in the area, a perfect area for the reproduction of large flightless birds. -> "Klallamornis evolved during a period of global cooling marked by the [spread? development? growth?] of kelp forests in the North Pacific and a renewal of volcanism along the coast of the Pacific Northwest, which created a chain of volcanic islands [in the area? near the coast?], a perfect [nesting site?] for large, flightless birds." The second half of the sentence is clunky, you might want to end it at Pacific Northwest and then start a new sentence about these islands and how good they were for Klallamornis. "The resultant chain of volcanic islands was ...."


 * ? Any progress? SilverTiger12 (talk) 14:38, 24 August 2023 (UTC)
 * It's been several weeks with no response at all here. Please respond soon or I'll have to fail this nomination. SilverTiger12 (talk) 20:21, 11 September 2023 (UTC)

GA criteria: 1.

2. Everything is cited to journal articles, and Earwig finds no plagiarism or copyvio. Pass.

3. Broad in coverage - yes.

4. Neutral - yes.

5. Stable - yes.

6. Illustrated - yes. I'm not sure the Waimanu image and the gallery of penguins and auks really help the article- I find the gallery more confusing really. IMO only two images, one penguin and one cormorant, would be enough.

As it has now been over a month with no response,, I am failing without prejudice. Sorry, and good luck next time. --SilverTiger12 (talk) 14:04, 19 September 2023 (UTC)