Talk:Klonoa: Door to Phantomile/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Rapunzel-bellflower (talk · contribs) 22:01, 15 January 2019 (UTC)

OK I think I addressed all points. Regarding "young boy creature", I changed it to just "boy", but am open to suggestions. It's never stated in the game (or any related media) what type of creature or animal he is. All we can say is he's a furry anthropomorphic mammal. TarkusAB talk 00:47, 18 January 2019 (UTC)


 * You've made a lot of progress. I have unintentionally led you astray in my suggested correction for the eavesdrop problem: it seems that the correct preposition that goes with it is actually "on", not "onto". Sorry about that! Furry anthropomorphic animal works quite nicely if you still would like to change it; boy works as well. Reading through a second time, I caught the very minor "IGN wrote agreed that[...]" and "It was postponed so it could be upgraded it to". I would also like an accessdate for ref 42. As for the too-similar wording, I was concerned about the phrase "inflated like a balloon" that appears in the Game Revolution review and the gameplay section. Best wishes, Rapunzel-bellflower (talk) 03:50, 19 January 2019 (UTC)
 * Fixed, although I don't think "inflated like a balloon" constituted plagiarism. All other ways to say this are needlessly wordy. It is the simplest phrase to express this idea so not plagiarism. TarkusAB talk 15:05, 19 January 2019 (UTC)
 * Hi! That's definitely possible that "inflated like a balloon" may meet common use. I'm very happy with all the changes made, and I believe that it now meets all the GA criteria. Keep up the great work! Best wishes, Rapunzel-bellflower (talk) 19:48, 19 January 2019 (UTC)