Talk:Konnie Huq/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 11:51, 29 June 2020 (UTC)

I'll have a go at this one. Chiswick Chap (talk) 11:51, 29 June 2020 (UTC)

Comments
This is a well-written, properly structured and fully-cited biography. The filmography is admirable.


 * Notting Hill and Ealing High School, despite its name, is now an independent school (and was when Huq went there).
 * Added this in.


 * Trained at the National Youth Music Theatre. When exactly? She did GCSEs and A-levels and university, all full-time...
 * Sources I've seen support 1989 and 1990, I'm not sure beyond that. I also moved that mention of the NYMT into the previous paragraph.


 * When a program is bluelinked to a Wiki-article it doesn't need much description, but when it isn't (e.g. I Cinna (the Poet), The Tube) then a brief gloss of explanation would be helpful.
 * Added some of these in, let me know if you see any omissions.


 * "hoping to reunite children with their families (from which both had been separated due to war)". Needs rephrasing.
 * Yes, it did. Reworded.


 * Blue Peter apologies - not sure the quotation is justified here. Best have a paraphrase, if indeed the incident is relevant here: is it actually about her at all, or just Blue Peter? If it relates to her, we should say what the connection is. After all, the BBC has producers and directors who make decisions on such things.
 * Reworded.


 * 'Olympic Torch incident' - is this notable for a whole section with two quotations, or even for a brief paragraph? It occupies almost as much space as 'Charity work' which is clearly a far larger topic. Personally I'd cut the whole thing.
 * I've kept a reduced mention of it (under personal life now) but would have no problems with removing that if you think it's more appropriate to do so.

Minor comments

 * The word "also" occurs rather too often, especially in 'Presenting and panel shows'.
 * Reworded and also did some removals. Is this OK now?


 * As a race, "Red Bull Air Race" is in Roman, but if it's a Channel 4 TV program then it should be in italics.
 * Amended.


 * Probably wikilink rapper.
 * Done.