Talk:Kosmos Energy/Archive 1

Proposing article update
Hi there, I'm here to make some suggestions to improve this article. As you can see, this article is not very comprehensive, and the most recent details are now two years old. As disclosure, I do have a financial conflict of interest, as I am here on behalf of Kosmos Energy, working with agency Ogilvy through my work at Beutler Ink.

Overall, my draft provides an up-to-date overview of Kosmos Energy. This includes updates to basic company details for the infobox and more information throughout the article. Also, I have formatted the article to match similar company articles on Wikipedia with the inclusion of standalone sections for History, Operations, and Corporate overview.

The full draft of the article is in my user space so editors can see exactly what I'm proposing for this article: User:16912_Rhiannon/Kosmos_Energy. You can also see the changes vs. the current article, in 

In case it would be easier for editors to review, I suggest working section-by-section, starting with the infobox:

Edit request: Infobox
The live infobox is contains financial figures from 2013 and incorrectly identifies Brian Maxted as CEO. (Mr. Maxted is chief exploration officer; Andrew G. Inglis is chief executive officer). My infobox also includes 2016 revenue, number of employees, founding partners, and copy edits to the existing text.

As I do have a financial COI, I do not intend to make any edits to the live article, and instead hope that an uninvolved editor (or editors) can review and take my drafted changes live if they're appropriate. Thanks in advance! 16912 Rhiannon (Talk · COI) 21:33, 1 August 2017 (UTC)


 * Thanks . Your request has been implemented. Feel free to come back with a new request if there's anything else you want to include. jd22292 (Jalen D. Folf) (talk) 01:12, 2 August 2017 (UTC)
 * I was surprised to see that this edit request asked that net revenue be added to the infobox, but not the company's net income. Upon further investigation, I found that Kosmos Energy lost $284 million dollars last year. I believe that information belongs in the infobox along with what 16912 Rhiannon suggested, especially as it gives a more balanced look at the company's finances. Best, Altamel (talk) 02:00, 2 August 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you jd22292 and Altamel for the review of the request and updating the article's infobox. Re: net income, that's a reasonable addition and apologies I had not included it (should we also add total equity and operating income?). Previously, the article's infobox had only included assets and not net revenue or net income, so adding these figures is certainly helpful to readers. Thanks again and I'll be back soon with a follow up request to review some more suggested changes. 16912 Rhiannon (Talk &middot; COI)  03:04, 2 August 2017 (UTC)

Edit request: Operations
Thanks again jd22292 and Altamel for updating the infobox. Continuing on that work, I'm proposing a draft for a new section, Operations. The section would provide an overview of Kosmos Energy's overall operations, with subsections for its work in Ghana, Senegal, Mauritania, Suriname, Sao Tome and Principe, Morocco, and Western Sahara. This draft is intended to replace all of the content that follows the sentence regarding the BBC documentary in the current article.

This draft retains the following from the current article:
 * Information about the oil drilling in the Cap Boujdour area off the coast of Western Sahara, including the UN legal opinion details
 * The draft adds Kosmos' response to the issue, which is not included in the current article
 * I trimmed the sentence about the company planning for a second drill, since this strikes me as WP:Crystal ball; the company had mentioned in a 2015 press release about a potential second well but one has not been drilled yet, and no plans have been announced. The company's website about Western Sahara currently says "we expect to acquire additional 3D seismic and use it with our existing technical knowledge to decide whether to drill a second well". I'm not opposed to adding back a mention (with a more neutral source, as the Western Sahara Resource Watch opposes Kosmos' development of Western Saharan resources, whereas there are multiple neutral sources that quote the 2015 press release about the potential second well) if others feel that this information should be included
 * Information about Tortue-1 and operations in Mauritania, providing a little more detail to bring this information up-to-date

I've included the draft and markup below, and you can also see it within the full draft in my userspace.

As mentioned above, I do not intend to make any edits to the live article, and instead hope that an uninvolved editor (or editors) can review and make the changes they feel are appropriate. Let me know if there are any questions or feedback on the draft. Thanks in advance! 16912 Rhiannon (Talk · COI) 20:00, 2 August 2017 (UTC)


 * ✅. Beagel (talk) 18:22, 3 September 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks, Beagel! I also posted a new edit request for History below. If you have a little time to look that over and move it into the live article if you feel the updates are appropriate, that would be great. Let me know if there are any questions or feedback. Thanks in advance, 16912 Rhiannon (Talk &middot; COI) 21:04, 5 September 2017 (UTC)

Edit request: History
Continuing on with my requests here, I'm proposing another new section, History. As is most common, it makes sense to add this section directly after the introduction, before the recently added Operations section. My History draft summarizes Kosmos Energy's history, focusing on major developments for the company. This draft incorporates the following from the current article's introduction that may be better placed in this section:
 * Detail on the documentary film and BBC show (although I reworded it to provide additional context on the two titles)

As I have done in my previous requests, I've included the draft and markup below, and you can also see it within the full draft in my userspace.

As always, I do not intend to make any edits to the live article, and instead hope that an uninvolved editor (or editors) can review and make the changes they feel are appropriate. Let me know if there are any questions or feedback on the draft. Thanks in advance! 16912 Rhiannon (Talk · COI) 21:04, 5 September 2017 (UTC)
 * Wondering if you'd be interested to look at this request, too? Thanks! 16912 Rhiannon (Talk &middot; COI) 16:27, 12 September 2017 (UTC)

✅ with some restructuring and changes (e.g. removing repetitions=. Beagel (talk) 15:13, 16 September 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks so much, Beagel! I noticed there is a typo under Suriname. It reads "50%t". Are you able to fix that?


 * Also, because "media" can be somewhat ambiguous, I worry that the Media section could become a WP:COATRACK. What were your thoughts about putting this information into its own section? Could it be merged back into History? If not, perhaps renaming it would help reduce ambiguity. One idea I had isDocumentary, if you think that might work.


 * Lastly, I'll be posting my final section edit request for this article in just a moment, suggesting addition of a Corporate overview, if you have time, I'd very much appreciate your review. Thanks in advance, 16912 Rhiannon (Talk &middot; COI) 14:15, 22 September 2017 (UTC)

✅. I fixed the typo. Also, after reconsidering I moved the media section back to the history section. However, I am open to proposals how this information could be better presented. Beagel (talk) 17:59, 24 September 2017 (UTC)

Edit request: Corporate overview
Hello, all. This is my final section edit request for this article. I'm proposing a new section called Corporate overview. The short section would provide information on the corporation: its headquarters, place of incorporation, stock ticker information, number of employees, board of directors, and involvement in the Dallas area (where it is based).

As mentioned above, due to my financial COI (working on behalf of Kosmos via Ogilvy as part of my work at Beutler Ink) I do not intend to make any edits to the live article, and instead hope that an uninvolved editor (or editors) can review and make the changes they feel are appropriate. Beagel, interested in this, too? Let me know if there are any questions or feedback on the draft. Thanks in advance! 16912 Rhiannon (Talk · COI) 14:27, 22 September 2017 (UTC)

✅ with some additional re-arrangements between sections. Beagel (talk) 18:52, 24 September 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks so much, Beagel! I'm taking a last long look through in comparison with my draft to make sure I've not missed anything and to see if I have any follow up questions, then I hope you don't mind if I ping you again? Meantime, I wanted to ask about the mention of the documentary in the introduction: since this was a major documentary, I understand if it should be mentioned in the lede but the details as presented now are a little muddled and not consistent with the details in the main body of the article. Would it make sense to shorten as "Kosmos was a focus of a 2013 documentary, Big Men, that followed the company as it worked to establish the Jubilee oil field in Ghana."? What do you think? 16912 Rhiannon (Talk &middot; COI) 17:10, 25 September 2017 (UTC)
 * Seems acceptable per WP:LEAD. Beagel (talk) 22:15, 27 September 2017 (UTC)

Thanks so much again, Beagel for the review of my requests here and incorporating the details into the live article. I've been taking some time to comb through for any final fixes needed and I have found a few small issues, if you'd have time to take a look? To make things easier, I've fixed all these in an updated draft on this page in my user space, so you could simply copy and paste the markup across if you agree with the changes. (This user draft is the current live article, plus the changes I've listed below. Here's .)


 * In the introduction, the wording says "it has been involved in the discovery and development of the Jubilee oil field...", which sounds like Kosmos just played a part in the discovery vs. actually discovering the field. Could this be updated to say simply "It discovered the Jubilee oil field..."?
 * Also in the intro, I would say that Kosmos was "the focus" not "a focus" of "the documentary Big Men"
 * Could a comma be added in the sentence in History re: the Boynton film? I would add this after "work to develop the field"
 * The paragraph on Western Sahara in History is a rather large block of text. Perhaps we can break that up into several paragraphs. Could we begin new paragraphs starting with the following sentences: "The company said local populations would benefit from the economic development of the region" and "In 2016, Norway's Council on Ethics recommended that the country's Government Pension Fund Global exclude Kosmos Energy and Cairn Energy Plc. from its investment portfolio due to their activities in Western Sahara"?
 * I'd like to suggest adding mention of the listing of the company on the London stock exchange at the end of August, sorry I missed adding this in earlier! We can include this in the Corporate affairs at the end of the first paragraph: Kosmos also trades on the London Stock Exchange. Perhaps we can include this at the end of History as well: Kosmos listed on the London Stock Exchange on August 21, 2017.
 * The article inconsistently abbreviates the United Nations as "UN" and "U.N." Could these all be changed to "UN", as per MOS:ABBREV?
 * In Ghana, can we add that Kosmos discovered the Jubilee Oil Field at the very beginning, before mentioning its stake in the oil field? For example: Kosmos discovered the Jubilee Oil Field in 2007...
 * Also in Ghana, the measurement conversions for barrels shows symbols, whereas all other conversions are written out in the article. Can we add to those two values?
 * In Sao Tome and Principe, we can update the paragraph on the 3D seismic survey to show that it has been completed. Could we add the following to the end of the second paragraph? The survey was completed on August 20, 2017.
 * In Morocco and Western Sahara, could we hyphenate "non-operated"?
 * Also, I noticed in the Morocco and Western Sahara section that there's a sentence missing a citation here re: license of the Boujdour block, so I suggest using the Kosmos 2016 10-K for that
 * In Sponsorship, could we delete including reduction of waste"?

Again, to hopefully make this list of little fixes easier, I've made them all in markup in my userspace that you can just copy and paste. If you have any questions or feedback, happy to discuss! Also, if I upload a logo under fair use, would you be willing to add it? Thanks in advance, 16912 Rhiannon (Talk &middot; COI) 02:44, 4 October 2017 (UTC)

✅. However, I think that the Western Sahara thing fits better in one paragraph rather than in three paragraphs. Probably needs some trimming. Beagel (talk) 11:33, 28 October 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks so much, Beagel! Appreciate you looking through these edits. There is one little typo in your updates: "On the London Stock Exchange its was", I'm guessing should be "it was". Perhaps this sentence could simply be reworded as "It was listed on the London Stock Exchange..."? For the logo, I'll drop another quick edit request below for the logo, if you're able to take a peek that would be great but no worries if not. Thanks again, 16912 Rhiannon (Talk · COI) 14:48, 30 October 2017 (UTC)
 * ✅ Beagel (talk) 14:22, 4 November 2017 (UTC)

Request: Logo
Hi again, I have one last request for this article. I've uploaded the company's logo as fair use and would like to request its addition to the infobox. You can see the logo here: File:Kosmos-Energy-logo.png

As I'm here on behalf of Kosmos Energy via Ogilvy, as part of my work at Beutler Ink, I'd prefer an uninvolved editor review and place the logo in the article if appropriate. Thanks! 16912 Rhiannon (Talk · COI) 14:48, 30 October 2017 (UTC) ✅ Beagel (talk) 14:24, 4 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Thank you! There's been a recent announcement from Kosmos, so I may be back with one small additional request. For now, thanks so much for reviewing these requests. 16912 Rhiannon (Talk &middot; COI) 14:31, 6 November 2017 (UTC)

Edit request: Adding Equatorial Guinea
Hi there, excuse my being back here so soon. I'm hoping it's not too much to ask for a quick update based on the recent announcement that Kosmos Energy signed contracts to enter Equatorial Guinea. Below, I've put together a short addition to potentially be added to Operations. If editors think it's appropriate, Equatorial Guinea could also be mentioned in the introduction.

As I'm here on behalf of Kosmos Energy via Ogilvy, as part of my work at Beutler Ink, I'd prefer an uninvolved editor review and place the following in the article's Operations section if appropriate. Beagel, perhaps you have a few minutes to look at this? Thanks! 16912 Rhiannon (Talk · COI) 20:48, 9 November 2017 (UTC)
 * ✅ I moved the date to start the sentence to make it less journalistic. &thinsp;&mdash; Ammarpad (talk) 22:54, 9 November 2017 (UTC)


 * Thanks so much Ammarpad! I have a follow up ask and I apologize for not including this earlier: After looking at the recent update, I realized the article should also include Kosmos' acquisition of Hess Corporation's interest in the Ceiba Field and Okume Complex assets offshore Equatorial Guinea. Here's an updated version of the section, including this info:


 * Would you mind making this edit, if it looks ok? Thanks again, 16912 Rhiannon (Talk &middot; COI) 03:19, 14 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Also pinging Beagel to see if you'd be able to look at this? As well, and sorry I only just noticed this, there's a line that I'd included in my draft for Operations re: Western Sahara and it seems to have been snipped out when you moved the related material into History. Could you re-add the following before "In an article from February 2015,":
 * The UN stated in 2002 that any further oil exploration in Western Sahara would be in violation of international law if it was not in accordance with the wishes of the people of the territory.
 * The citation for this is
 * Thanks in advance! 16912 Rhiannon (Talk &middot; COI) 22:08, 15 November 2017 (UTC)
 * Hi, 16912 Rhiannon. I left it out purposely. While I understand your wish to explain the issue in most detailed way, this article should only consist of issues directly about Kosmos and not about the status of Western Sahara or oil exploration in Western Sahara in general. It should be included in more relevant articles. Beagel (talk) 11:53, 16 December 2017 (UTC)
 * Aha, thanks Beagel. I did wonder if it was something like that but felt with my COI it was better safe than sorry and wanted to double check. Thanks for the explanation and happy holidays! 16912 Rhiannon (Talk &middot; COI) 13:57, 18 December 2017 (UTC)
 * Wondering if you'd have a moment to take a look at the above couple of questions? I've pinged editors who've previously helped here but it looks like both are busy elsewhere, and I see you're the most recent person to edit the Kosmos article. Thanks so much in advance, 16912 Rhiannon (Talk &middot; COI) 22:46, 8 December 2017 (UTC)

✅  Spintendo  ᔦᔭ   03:22, 9 December 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks so much, Spintendo! And noting again, in case Beagel returns soon: the line re: the UN's 2002 statement has not yet been re-added, so if you wanted to take another look at that, that would be great. 16912 Rhiannon (Talk &middot; COI) 22:24, 10 December 2017 (UTC)