Talk:Kyle Palmieri/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: GhostRiver (talk · contribs) 17:45, 8 January 2022 (UTC)

Hello! I'll be taking a look at this article for the January 2022 GAN backlog drive. If you haven't already signed up, please feel free to join in! Although QPQ is not required, if you're feeling generous, I also have a list of GA nominations of my own right here.

Infobox and lede

 * IPA pronunciation needs a reference, I recommend this one ✅
 * Delink "American" per MOS:OVERLINK ✅
 * Sentence needed in the first paragraph that he previously played for the Ducks and Devils, especially since the Devils are introduced sans-location and link in the second para ✅
 * He split his first three seasons with the team split repetition of "split" ✅

Early life

 * Comma after "Smithtown, New York" per MOS:GEOCOMMA ✅
 * "moved to Smithtown for a few years" "spent a few years in Smithtown" ✅

Amateur

 * Spell out and link New Jersey Devils for "Devils-sponsored teams" ✅
 * "junior" should be capitalized in "16U Junior Devils" ✅
 * Comma after "New Jersey state final" ✅
 * Link hat-trick ✅
 * What team drafted him in 2008? ✅

Anaheim Ducks

 * Comma after "to his linemate Nick Bonino" ✅
 * Comma after "He was returned to the AHL to begin the season" ✅
 * "plus/minus" "plus–minus" with the WL ✅
 * "Upon being returned to the AHL after playing in seven games, Palmieri was selected" "After playing in seven games for the Ducks, Palmieri was returned to the AHL, where he was selected" ✅
 * Link AHL All-Star Classic ✅
 * "first Ducks rookie" "first Anaheim rookie" to reduce "Ducks" repetition in sentence ✅
 * Some sentence should be mentioned about the end of the lockout and when he was promoted, as I thought at first that the hat-trick came when he was still an Admiral ✅
 * second-youngest Ducks subject-verb agreement or missing word ✅
 * Link "Western Conference Quarterfinal" to 2013 Stanley Cup playoffs ✅
 * Link "2013-14 season" ✅
 * "Ducks' topline" "Ducks' top line" ✅
 * "home-town" "hometown" ✅
 * Postseason stats for the 2014 playoffs? ✅
 * Any idea why he was placed on injury reserve in December 2014? ✅

New Jersey Devils

 * "second and third-round draft picks" "second- and third-round picks" ✅
 * Comma after "re-joined coach John Hynes" ✅
 * Comma after "at the 2016 World Cup of Hockey" ✅
 * "while maintaining a shot-percentage of 13.5%" "while maintaining a 13.5 shot percentage." ✅
 * "Upon rejoining the Devils, Palmieri reached the 500-games plateau" rejoining them after what? (The All-Star break, possibly?) ✅
 * It's the start of a new season. I will make it more clear
 * Stats for the 2018-19 season? ✅

New York Islanders

 * In his debut game against the Flyers on April 9, Palmieri became the 512th skater to appear in an Islander regular-season game. Trivia ✅
 * "In the Islanders final" "In the Islanders' final" ✅
 * "post-season goal" "postseason goal" ✅
 * Mention that the Isles lost to Tampa in the finals ✅

Personal life

 * Link Mattituck, New York ✅
 * Link United States Army, New York Army National Guard, and United States Army Rangers ✅
 * Also, "ranger" should be capitalized ✅
 * ""who best exemplifies leadership qualities on and off the ice and has made a noteworthy humanitarian contribution in his community."" ""who best exemplifies leadership qualities on and off the ice and has made a noteworthy humanitarian contribution in his community"." per MOS:LQ ✅

General comments

 * Images are properly licensed and relevant
 * No stability concerns in the revision history
 * Earwig is being slow af right now so I'll check it later
 * Hey Drake... where's the international play section? ✅

Putting on hold to allow nominator to address comments, you know the drill by now. —  Ghost River  16:41, 9 January 2022 (UTC)
 * , All issues have been addressed. HickoryOughtShirt?4 (talk) 17:38, 14 January 2022 (UTC)
 * Everything looks good now, happy to pass! —  Ghost River  03:52, 15 January 2022 (UTC)