Talk:Kyoto Animation arson attack/GA1

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Reviewer: MX (talk · contribs) 22:55, 29 January 2020 (UTC)

Review
Will review. Please stay put for a future post here. MX ( ✉  •  ✎  ) 22:55, 29 January 2020 (UTC)
 * I look forward to the review. Thanks for taking the time to do this. ··· 日本穣 ·  投稿  · Talk to Nihonjoe ·  Join WP Japan ! 00:22, 30 January 2020 (UTC)

Lead

 * - The Incident section says there was an explosion caused by the gasoline mixing with the air, and then the perpetrator setting people on fire. No mention of him setting himself on fire. I would add this fact in the Incident section too.
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Background

 * - There are three studios total, correct? Any reason why there isn't any Studio 3 and 4? Just want to make sure we have it right before moving on.
 * There is no "4" because 4 is considered an unlucky number. "3" appears to be a product development division (what is called merchandise development in the next question), but not a studio where things are animated. Thus the numbers seem to be correct. Dekimasu よ! 04:42, 31 January 2020 (UTC)


 * - The merchandise development division building or which one? At this point it's unclear which studio or building we are talking about (ideally we'd want to know which one was caught on fire since I'm confused on how many different locations there are).
 * Studio 1 is the one that was lit on fire. I have seen that construction was completed in February 2008, so that's probably the one referred to here. Dekimasu よ! 04:42, 31 January 2020 (UTC)

Incident

 * - Please WP:REDLINK this page because we have one in Japanese.
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Victims

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 * - Question. Previously you linked the national police and then mentioned "police" for the following mentions. Now you mention the Kyoto Police (I assume this police force is different than the national police). Can you confirm that the national police was for all previous mentions up until here? Also, do you think the Kyoto Police could have its own article? If so, please add a redlink with an appropriate naming.


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 * - I would spell out the entire phrase and then add (ICU) for future mentions.
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Suspect

 * - I assume it's the same as the Kyoto Police from the previous section? Consider keeping the same naming convention for consistency.
 * Not sure on this one. The prefectural police are on the same level as state police or state highway patrol departments in the States, but sometimes they also handle local police issues. I've never been to Kyoto, so someone else will have to answer this one. ··· 日本穣 ·  投稿  · Talk to Nihonjoe ·  Join WP Japan ! 01:19, 31 January 2020 (UTC)
 * The link says he was passed along to a "伏見署員". ja:伏見警察署 implies that this refers to a prefectural police station. I also noticed that the caps usage of "Kyoto Police" is a bit inconsistent in the article. Dekimasu よ! 02:06, 31 January 2020 (UTC)
 * - Another citekill instance, considering trimming or merging.
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 * - has been → was
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 * - is reported → was reported
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 * - has begun → began
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 * - in → on
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 * - Is "Kyoto" by itself fine? Or is there a difference from the previous usages of "Kyoto"?
 * There's both a Kyoto Prefecture and a Kyoto City. It's good to have the specificity here is there are hospitals outside the city but within the prefecture. ··· 日本穣 ·  投稿  · Talk to Nihonjoe ·  Join WP Japan ! 01:19, 31 January 2020 (UTC)
 * - He know that it was reported that he had mostly recovered. It's in the source. I would trim that to "He recovered from most of his injuries and acknowledged responsibility for the attack. He expressed ..." or something like that.
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 * - "Aoba had a criminal history ..."
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Impact on productions

 * - ddmmyy format, since you've been using that before
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Reactions

 * - Citekill, consider trimming or merging
 * ✅. Reduced refs by two. Also merged all condolences and support refs into one footnote. ··· 日本穣 ·  投稿  · Talk to Nihonjoe ·  Join WP Japan ! 00:42, 31 January 2020 (UTC)
 * - Same here
 * ✅. Merged all condolences and support refs into one footnote. ··· 日本穣 ·  投稿  · Talk to Nihonjoe ·  Join WP Japan ! 01:08, 31 January 2020 (UTC)
 * - Same here.
 * ✅. Merged all condolences and support refs into one footnote. ··· 日本穣 ·  投稿  · Talk to Nihonjoe ·  Join WP Japan ! 01:08, 31 January 2020 (UTC)

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