Talk:LaDainian Tomlinson/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: NSNW (talk · contribs) 18:38, 10 September 2022 (UTC)

I'll try and get to this as soon as possible; I have some other things I need to do personally but this should be done in 1-2 weeks. NSNW (talk) 18:38, 10 September 2022 (UTC)


 * , Just checking on this as it's been four weeks. Harper J. Cole (talk) 23:24, 8 October 2022 (UTC)
 * My apologies, I was completely distracted by other things currently in my life. I'll get to work on it tomorrow. NSNW (talk) 01:30, 9 October 2022 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it well written?
 * A. The prose is clear and concise, and the spelling and grammar are correct:
 * B. It complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, words to watch, fiction, and list incorporation:
 * 1) Is it verifiable with no original research?
 * A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance with the layout style guideline:
 * B. All in-line citations are from reliable sources, including those for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons&mdash;science-based articles should follow the scientific citation guidelines:
 * C. It contains no original research:
 * D. It contains no copyright violations nor plagiarism:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. It addresses the main aspects of the topic:
 * B. It stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail (see summary style):
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * It represents viewpoints fairly and without editorial bias, giving due weight to each:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * It does not change significantly from day to day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute:
 * 1) Is it illustrated, if possible, by images?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid non-free use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Status query
NSNW, Harper J. Cole, where does this review stand? It's been over a month since the most recent post to this page, and the review has been open for four and a half months. Is there any chance it can get moving soon? BlueMoonset (talk) 19:50, 27 December 2022 (UTC)


 * BlueMoonset, I think NSNW has been less active lately. I stand ready to make changes as needed. Harper J. Cole (talk) 20:07, 27 December 2022 (UTC)
 * @BlueMoonset, I've been taking a break from Wikipedia for a little while, mainly because of schoolwork and burnout tbh, and I completely forgot about this nomination. Now that it's break I can focus on it. Give me a few days and there will be more progress. NSNW (talk) 14:18, 29 December 2022 (UTC)

Prose
Initial Findings:

Early life

 * "Tomlinson did not see his father very often afterwards"; change it to 'afterward'.
 * "Tomlinson was able to meet Smith while attending a camp run by Dallas Cowboys' tight end Jay Novacek."; Grammatically it's correct, but the generally the way these sentences are written in football Wikipedia articles is to write it as 'Dallas Cowboys tight end' instead of 'Cowboys''.

College career

 * "Prior to Tomlinson's arrival,"; change to 'Before Tomlinson's arrival'.
 * "He was their single-game, single-season and career record holder in both rushing touchdowns and rushing yards"; I prefer the Oxford comma and I don't know how many times you did or didn't use it but for now change this to 'single-game, single-season, and career record holder'.

2002 NFL season

 * "Tomlinson tied or broke numerous franchise records during the course of the season"; 'the course of' is redundant, remove it.
 * "San Diego were 8–4 after beating the Broncos"; 'was' to 'were'.
 * "He again led the league in touches with 451, which proved to be a career high"; add a hyphen to make it 'career-high'.

2003 NFL season

 * "Tomlinson finished with 1,645 rushing yards, third most in the league. He averaged 5.3 yards per carry, sixth-highest among backs with 100-plus carries; this would be the best average of his career."; hyphenate 'third most' and add 'the' before sixth-highest.

More to come later tomorrow. NSNW (talk) 03:23, 28 January 2023 (UTC)


 * I've amended these now. Harper J. Cole (talk) 14:54, 28 January 2023 (UTC)


 * Continuing:

2004 NFL season

 * "On August 14, Tomlinson signed an eight-year contract worth $60 million dollars, with $21 million guaranteed."; the MOS states that it should be '$60 million', the 'dollars' is redundant.
 * "Tomlinson's individual yardage numbers were down from the previous season,"; 'individual' is redundant.
 * "and he had barely half as many reception with 53."; 'receptions' should be plural.
 * "During the sudden-death overtime period San Diego gained a first down at the New York 22"; add a comma after 'period'. NSNW (talk) 22:14, 28 January 2023 (UTC)

2006 NFL season

 * "The Chargers began their regular season with a 27–0 win at Oakland, Tomlinson rushing 31 times for 131 yards and a touchdown."; should be 'with Tomlinson rushing 31 times'.
 * "A fumble recovery by Shawne Merriman soon afterwards gave San Diego the ball on the Denver 7."; change it to 'afterward', and specify '7' as 'Denver's seven-yard line'.
 * "that was his 28th rushing touchdowns of the season"; change it to 'touchdown'.
 * "Tomlinson's personal good form continued,"; 'personal' is redundant, remove it.

2008 NFL season

 * "Tomlinson rushed five times for 25 rushing yards and a trushing ouchdown before his groin injury forced him out of the game"; I think you mixed up a t here, 'rushing touchdown'.
 * "His 344 touches, 1,536 scrimmage yards and 12 total touchdowns also represented a clear drop from the previous season."; Oxford comma, add one after 'scrimmage yards'. NSNW (talk) 22:30, 28 January 2023 (UTC)
 * Now covered up to this point. Harper J. Cole (talk) 23:20, 28 January 2023 (UTC)

2010 NFL season

 * "Tomlinson stayed injury-free, missing only the regular season finale, when he was rested with the Jets assured of a wildcard appearance in the playoffs."; remove the comma after 'finale'. NSNW (talk) 23:05, 28 January 2023 (UTC)

2011 NFL season

 * "Greene, now the main running back, had over 1,000 yards, but the Jets rushing attack were ranked only 22nd in the league, while their offense as a whole were 25th. Tomlinson's new pass-catching role yielded 42 catches for 449 receiving yards and two receiving touchdowns; he averaged 10.7 yards per reception, a career high."; the two 'were's' should be changed to 'was', and add a hyphen to make it 'career-high'.

Legacy and playing style

 * "He also rushed for 22 touchdowns, caught four and threw another three"; Oxford comma after 'four'.
 * "In goal line situations"; hyphenate 'goal line'.
 * "An elusive runner in the open field who would use stiff-arms to break tackles"; remove the hyphen in 'stiff-arms'.
 * "When Tomlinson's number was retired in 2015, a trio of analysts on NFL.com placed him 3rd, 7th and 8th respectively on their lists of top running backs in the Super Bowl era."; Oxford comma after '7th'.
 * "In 2021, statistical site Pro-Football-Reference.com ranked him as the fifth-best running back in NFL history."; change it to 'the statistical site'.

Personal life

 * "Tomlinson has his own charitable foundation called Tomlinson's Touching Lives Foundation."; change it to 'Tomlinson has a charitable foundation'.

That's pretty much all I've got. Once these are corrected this is a passing review. NSNW (talk) 00:58, 29 January 2023 (UTC)


 * All amended now. Harper J. Cole (talk) 01:27, 29 January 2023 (UTC)
 * Good work! It took a while but we finally got this nomination to pass. Now I can focus on other things. NSNW (talk) 02:36, 29 January 2023 (UTC)