Talk:LaMelo Ball/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 14:14, 22 January 2018 (UTC)

Taking a look now. I will make straigthforward coyedits as I go (please correct me if I accidentally change the meaning) and jot questions below:


 * Ball is known as an exceptionally popular but polarizing basketball figure  - I think I'd drop the "exceptionally" as it sounds a bit over the top...
 * Done. TempleM (talk) 21:29, 22 January 2018 (UTC)


 *  He has maintained a strong presence in social media, most notably with over 3.4 million followers on Instagram. - let facts speak for themselves. I'd trim this section to, "Known as a popular but polarizing basketball figure, Ball has over 3.4 million followers on Instagram. "


 *  He is one of the most publicized high school-aged basketball players with a signature shoe by his father's company Big Baller Brand and a role on the Facebook reality show Ball in the Family. - a comma after "players"..?


 * ' 'The brand was inspired by LaMelo and his brothers Lonzo and LiAngelo'' - I'd remove this line, it's sort of obvious and sort of superfluous.


 *  .... called the Melo Ball 1 (MB1), which will be available in late 2017. - needs correct tense. "was to be available.." or something.

Overall it's pretty comprehensive. The main risk is that parts might veer into promotional-sounding territory, but I think I have found all examples of that....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:45, 23 January 2018 (UTC)
 * I have fixed all the issues you brought up. TempleM (talk) 22:00, 23 January 2018 (UTC)


 * Actually...did the MB1 have an actual release date? That would be good to add if available. Otherwise it just looks like it was updated by changing the tense when more info should be availalbe
 * Can't find a date, but I have tweaked it to make it sound better. TempleM (talk) 23:02, 24 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Yes it sounds a bit better. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:36, 24 January 2018 (UTC)


 * The same thing with Ball in the Family - I presume it has been aired. A line or two from very recent sources talking about that (especially with LaMelo mentioned) would be good
 * I have added more and made changes to that section. TempleM (talk) 23:02, 24 January 2018 (UTC)
 * It'be good to have a bit more on LaMelo in the show but if there is nothing to add, then that's no problem. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:36, 24 January 2018 (UTC)
 * I can't seem to find anything else notable about him that relates to the show. TempleM (talk) 23:51, 24 January 2018 (UTC)
 * Aaah well, you tried....Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:07, 25 January 2018 (UTC)


 * For the record, Earwigs' score is inflated due to (attributed) quotes, so that's ok.

1. Well written?:
 * Prose quality:
 * Manual of Style compliance:

2. Factually accurate and verifiable?:
 * References to sources:
 * Citations to reliable sources, where required:
 * No original research:

3. Broad in coverage?:
 * Major aspects:
 * Focused:

4. Reflects a neutral point of view?:
 * Fair representation without bias:

5. Reasonably stable?
 * No edit wars, etc. (Vandalism does not count against GA):

6. Illustrated by images, when possible and appropriate?:
 * Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

Overall:
 * Pass or Fail: - a nice read. cheers, Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 05:07, 25 January 2018 (UTC)