Talk:La Carcacha/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: K. Peake (talk · contribs) 17:12, 18 April 2023 (UTC)

GA review (see here for what the criteria are, and here for what they are not)

(Criteria marked are unassessed)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a. (prose, spelling, and grammar):
 * b. (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a. (reference section):
 * b. (citations to reliable sources):
 * c. (OR):
 * d. (copyvio and plagiarism):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a. (major aspects):
 * b. (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a. (images are tagged and non-free content have non-free use rationales):
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * b. (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/fail:
 * Pass/fail:

I will crack on with this today! --K. Peake 17:12, 18 April 2023 (UTC)

Infobox and lead

 * Pipe EMI Latin to Capitol Latin in the infobox
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Replace hlist with bullet points per Template:Infobox song
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "a song that was recorded by American singer Selena for her third studio album" → "a song recorded by American singer Selena for her third studio album,"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "It was written by" → "The song was written by"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * A. B. Quintanilla → A.B. Quintanilla with the wikilink
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Pipe melodies to Melody
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Reword the emphasized part per it being too repetitive with the body's wording
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * ""La Carcacha" is a Tejano cumbia song that is emblematic of Selena's style," → "It is a Tejano cumbia song that is emblematic of Selena's typical style,"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Pipe music critics to Music journalism
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Remove the release year of the song since that is not needed in the lead
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * ""La Carcacha" has continued to receive" → "it has received" and mention ones this includes
 * – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "in the Broadway musical" → "in the Broadway musical,"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * ""La Carcacha" triple platinum," → "it triple platinum," and make this the second sentence of the second para instead
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)

Background and inspiration

 * Change all mentions to A.B. and wikilink on the first instance
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Remove commas around Joe Ojeda
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Maybe the musical piece part could be simplified to him proclaiming he was inspired to compose by it?
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "he would pursue" → "he would pursue with"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "A month later," → "A month after the hotel incident," or something similar per this being a new para
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * I think a word more encyclopedic than "chagrin" should be used here
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Remove comma before Pete Astudillo
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "yet she remains unperturbed by" → "However, she lacks concern with" as a new sentence to avoid a run-on
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)

Music and lyrics

 * Audio sample looks good!
 * Thank you. – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * The first para is slightly out of order; the introduction and countdown parts should be at the end instead
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "It features the characteristic hip-swaying" → "It features the characteristic danceable"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Wikilink tempo to itself
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * The melodies are not mentioned by the source
 * It was cited by the wrong source. It has been fixed. – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Remove or replace Newsweek per WP:NEWSWEEK
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "The track bears a" → ""La Carcacha" harbors a"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "for the Del Rio News Herald," → "for the Del Rio News-Herald," with the wikilink
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Wikilink polkas per WP:PIPE
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "melodic hook" which he believed" → "melodic hook", which he believed"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * The Burr ref needs to be re-invoked for the second sentence if that is from [14] instead of [15]
 * It's from ref 15. – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Pipe melodies to Melody
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Remove the usage of ultimately because this adds nothing here
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Remove the Roiz lyrics praise since this is trivia
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "on "a junk car"" → "on "a clunker car"" per the source
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Remove the internal qualities sentence, as this is repetitive and adds nothing
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "or lack thereof. The song's lyrics championed the joys" → "or lack thereof, championing the joys"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "and defends her partner" → "and defending her partner"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "with billowing tailpipe smoke" start a new sentence here to avoid a run-on
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "Tejano music often suffered" → "Tejano music had often suffered"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "writing for the Austin American-Statesman, compared its" → "for the Austin American-Statesman, compared the song's"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Remove song after the year because speech marks imply this
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Wikilink Austin American-Statesman on the first instance instead
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "creates an auditory landscape" → "create an auditory landscape"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "Selena's biographer, Joe Nick Patoski, noted that" → "Selena biographer Joe Nick Patoski noted that"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Pipe call-and-response to Call and response
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)

Commercial and critical performance

 * Retitle to Reception per that being what both of these are types of
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "It made its debut on" → "It debuted on"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "peaked at number sixteen on the" → "peaked at number 16 on the US" per MOS:NUM and to specify this is not Mexico
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "The song peaked at number 21" → "It peaked at number 21"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Mention the date the certification was awarded and remove the "has", also should platinum really be capitalized?
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Pipe Houston Astrodome to Astrodome
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Pipe San Antonio Alamodome to Alamodome
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Remove overly obvious wikilinks on Miami and the Carribean
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "which compelled people to dance," → "which compelled them to dance,"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "the closing number for her" → "the closing number for Selena's"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "engaged from start to finish and" → "engaged throughout and"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * The source mentions "washing machine", but not the 1995 concert
 * It says "in the music video" which is false, the picture is of the 1995 concert. But I'll just remove it instead. – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Add "the" before Los Dinos
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "of the planet.", according to" → "of the planet", according to" and re-invoke the ref because this sentence uses a direct quote
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "squeezebox instrumental break."" → "squeezebox instrumental break"." per MOS:QUOTE
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Pipe Monterrey, Mexico to Monterrey
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)

Legacy and impact

 * ""La Carcacha" helped increased" → "The song helped increase"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * ""La Carcacha" helped opened" → "The latter helped open"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Start a new sentence at Michael Clark
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * ""La Carcacha" was the inaugural song" → "the former was the inaugural song"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Instead change the live medley sentence to writing that it was identified as a great offering for fans by Fernando Zamora of El Norte since it is jumbled at the moment
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Wikilink Chevrolet
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Pipe Los Angles Auto Show to LA Auto Show
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Add a comma after Selena Forever
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "deeming "La Carcacha" the quintessential" → "deeming it the quintessential"
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "Ana Barbara performed "La Carcacha" at the Selena ¡VIVE!" → "Ana Bárbara performed "La Carcacha" at the Selena ¡Vive!" with the wikilinks
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * "writing for the Tuscon Citizen," → "writing for the Tucson Citizen," with the wikilink
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Remove the comma after Cuco
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * None of the plagiarism info is sourced
 * It was removed by accident from a previous edit. I have restored the original source. – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)

Credits and personnel

 * Chris Perez → Chris Pérez with the wikilink
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)

Chart performance

 * Retitle to Charts
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * EFE should not be italicised
 * ✅ – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)


 * Why are Latin Pop Digital Song Sales and the Mexico chart linked to a section here but neither are in prose?
 * The LPDS is, and I've added the Mexico chart in the reception section. – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)

Certifications

 * Good

Final comments and verdict

 * until all of the issues are fixed; that went at a decent pace! --K. Peake 08:16, 19 April 2023 (UTC)
 * Thank you for reviewing the article. I have fixed the issues you have raised. Best – jona  ✉ 15:32, 19 April 2023 (UTC)
 * ✅ now, I had to do some copy editing but good work from you still, of course! --K. Peake 07:04, 20 April 2023 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your review! – jona  ✉ 15:07, 20 April 2023 (UTC)