Talk:La La Land (Demi Lovato song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Novice7 (talk) 04:41, 23 July 2011 (UTC)

Hello Pancake! I'll be reviewing this article. Novice7 (talk) 04:41, 23 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Great :) Do you think a screencap from the music video would be acceptable? I'm thinking one from the red carpet event with Demi and her Sonny co-stars. Pancake (talk) 21:48, 23 July 2011 (UTC)
 * I don't think it would pass NFCC... Maybe a screencap of the paparazzi taking photographs or a similar scene (which cannot be explained in words?) Novice7 (talk) 06:31, 24 July 2011 (UTC)
 * I hope it's not too much to ask, but maybe you can watch the video and see if you find a shot that would be acceptable? :) Thanks again for reviewing. This is like the fourth review you've done for me. Pancake (talk) 19:30, 25 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Yeah, sure. Fourth review it is :D Novice7 (talk) 03:42, 26 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Well, I saw the video. Maybe a shot between 0:35 and 0:50 (Demi shown walking while Tiffany and others are shown in the BG as celebrities)? <b style="font-family:Arial; color:CornflowerBlue;">Novice7</b> (<b style="font-family:Arial; color:DodgerBlue;">talk</b>) 09:34, 26 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Couldn't find a shot that really showed Tiffany or anyone else in the BG. Could you point it out here or something? Pancake (talk) 11:34, 26 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Oh, I just remembered something! WP:NFCC states: Non-free content is used only where no free equivalent is available, or could be created, that would serve the same encyclopedic purpose. We have free pics of Tiffany, Allisyn, Demi... <b style="font-family:Arial; color:CornflowerBlue;">Novice7</b> (<b style="font-family:Arial; color:DodgerBlue;">talk</b>) 13:46, 27 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Okay, never mind then :) let's just get on with the review :D 14:48, 27 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Can you wait till tomorrow? I'm kinda busy today :D Oh, btw, can you write a Live performances section? She performed the song on many shows/concert, so it should be included. You can search Google News Archive for references. <b style="font-family:Arial; color:CornflowerBlue;">Novice7</b> (<b style="font-family:Arial; color:DodgerBlue;">talk</b>) 15:14, 27 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Sure i can wait :] i'll try with live performances. Pancake (talk) 16:58, 27 July 2011 (UTC)


 * Checks
 * DAB – No Dab.
 * EL – No Dead/Redirect links.

Starting review
 * Lead
 * Is Lovato a singer-songwriter?
 * Isn't she? She does write her own songs.
 * "Singer-songwriters are musicians who write, compose and sing their own musical material including lyrics and melodies." – Lovato writes songs but does not compose their melodies... <b style="font-family:Arial; color:CornflowerBlue;">Novice7</b> (<b style="font-family:Arial; color:DodgerBlue;">talk</b>) 10:58, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Changed to recording artist Pancake (talk) 11:52, 29 July 2011 (UTC)


 * La La Land is one of six songs on the album co-written by the Jonas Brothers, who also contributed with backing vocals and guitars on the track. on → to
 * Done


 * Lovato wrote the song about being yourself in Hollywood and not letting other people change who you are. – could use a rewrite.
 * Suggestion? :)
 * I read it once again, and I don't find a problem :) I must have been sleeping when I first read the article :D You can add "Lovato has said that she ..."? <b style="font-family:Arial; color:CornflowerBlue;">Novice7</b> (<b style="font-family:Arial; color:DodgerBlue;">talk</b>) 10:58, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Done Pancake (talk) 11:52, 29 July 2011 (UTC)


 * The song achieved its highest peak in Ireland, reaching number thirty. – The song achieved its highest peak in Ireland, where it reached number thirty on the Irish Singles Chart.
 * Done


 * It was used to promote Lovato's starring Disney Channel sitcom Sonny with a Chance – rewrite?
 * Removed "starring"


 * Background and release
 * The band also contributed with backing vocals and played the guitar on the song. – mentioned above.
 * Done


 * "La La Land" was released as the album's second single on December 16, 2008 in the United States, – please add a source.
 * I don't have one. This is Don't Forget (song) all over again.
 * Oh, I see. <b style="font-family:Arial; color:CornflowerBlue;">Novice7</b> (<b style="font-family:Arial; color:DodgerBlue;">talk</b>) 10:58, 29 July 2011 (UTC)


 * Composition
 * The hook consists of the line "I will stay the same in the La La Land machine" – This sentence seems and sounds out of place.
 * Rewrite or remove completely?
 * I suggest removing it completely. <b style="font-family:Arial; color:CornflowerBlue;">Novice7</b> (<b style="font-family:Arial; color:DodgerBlue;">talk</b>) 10:58, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Done Pancake (talk) 11:52, 29 July 2011 (UTC)


 * and the guitars present in the song to English punk rock band The Clash – how can guitars be compared to a band? Did the reviewer compare their sounds?
 * Yeah, "the guitars recall the Clash". Maybe change to "[...] to works by English punk band..."?
 * Yes, that sounds better. <b style="font-family:Arial; color:CornflowerBlue;">Novice7</b> (<b style="font-family:Arial; color:DodgerBlue;">talk</b>) 10:58, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Done Pancake (talk) 11:52, 29 July 2011 (UTC)


 * I think the chord progression is F♯m–D–E?
 * You sure? How do you even figure that out? Pancake (talk) 11:52, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
 * I'm not sure either... I usually ask my friends for help lol. <b style="font-family:Arial; color:CornflowerBlue;">Novice7</b> (<b style="font-family:Arial; color:DodgerBlue;">talk</b>) 12:02, 29 July 2011 (UTC)


 * Reception
 * feels in La La Land [...] while the guitars recall the Clash  – remove the highlighted part.
 * Done


 * Music video
 * The video features appearances by Lovato's – shouldn't it be "appearances from Lovato's"?
 * Done


 * A video is then shown to the audience, which serves as the main portion of the video. – "video" repeats.
 * Done


 * the audience, and Beverly praising Lovato. – and ends with Beverly praising Lovato?
 * Done


 * Live performances
 * No issue.
 * You can use these sources (instead of TV.com?),,  too. <b style="font-family:Arial; color:CornflowerBlue;">Novice7</b> (<b style="font-family:Arial; color:DodgerBlue;">talk</b>) 10:58, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Switched TV.com with Telegraph. Pancake (talk) 11:52, 29 July 2011 (UTC)


 * References
 * Ref #28 -> italicize TV Guide
 * Done

That's all :) Oh hold and good luck. <b style="font-family:Arial; color:CornflowerBlue;">Novice7</b> (<b style="font-family:Arial; color:DodgerBlue;">talk</b>) 04:07, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
 * I think everything's done now :) Pancake (talk) 15:21, 29 July 2011 (UTC)
 * Good! Passing. <b style="font-family:Arial; color:CornflowerBlue;">Novice7</b> (<b style="font-family:Arial; color:DodgerBlue;">talk</b>) 04:19, 30 July 2011 (UTC)