Talk:Lady of the Forest/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 12:47, 7 August 2013 (UTC)

Hi Ruby, I'll be glad to take this one. Initial comments to follow in the next 1-3 days. Thanks as always for your contributions! -- Khazar2 (talk) 12:47, 7 August 2013 (UTC)

Overall this looks like your usual terrific work, and is more or less ready to pass. I've made a few tweaks as I went; feel free to revert any with which you disagree. I have a few suggestions below, but I don't think there's much work to be done here.


 * "having flashbacks to Sir Hugh's violent murder" -- can you clarify who Sir Hugh is? ("his friend Sir Hugh's" perhaps?)
 * "a rabid man" -- this threw me for a moment--does he literally have rabies? Or do you just mean in the sense of frenzied/angry?
 * The discussion in the "Analysis" section is slightly confusing. The footnotes show that Knight's comments are taken from a variety of sources, which is fine, but the in-text description (" In a chapter of Icons of the Middle Ages: Rulers, Writers, Rebels, and Saints"... " Knight continues that "...) implies a continuous line of reasoning from a single source. Can this be cleaned up a bit?
 * I cut the "prominent" from "prominent scholar" as a minor bit of peacocking per WP:PEA
 * The two uses of "noted" in the section should probably be reworded per WP:WTW -- Khazar2 (talk) 13:13, 7 August 2013 (UTC)
 * "entirely her own concoction." -- is this correct that Roberson refers to herself in the third person here? -- Khazar2 (talk) 13:23, 7 August 2013 (UTC)

Checklist
Thank you for the review! I believe I have addressed all of your concerns (I opted for "enraged" as a replacement for "rabid," and hopefully the analysis section looks better).  Ruby  2010/  2013  00:54, 9 August 2013 (UTC)
 * Yep, that'll do it--thanks. -- Khazar2 (talk) 00:58, 9 August 2013 (UTC)
 * Thanks again for reviewing this and others! Keep up the good work!  Ruby  2010/  2013  01:02, 9 August 2013 (UTC)