Talk:Laetitia Sonami

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There's a distinct lack of citations in pretty much all of the sections of this article except for the opening paragraph.

Some of the information in the first section should be moved to the biography section, especially the last few sentences.

The biography section should be broken up into more distinct sections such as early life, education, career, etc.

Consider adding a list of notable works at the bottom of the article before the bibliography.

You use the word "also" a lot in the Collaboration section. Consider different word choice.

You should talk about her work and more specifically what it is. The section on the Lady's Glove is helpful but it would be nice to have more information on her other works. MizRiz3133 (talk) 05:41, 3 April 2014 (UTC)

1. Citations ok 2. No gaps 3. Readable & clear Word "performance" should be "performances" This is right before the [2] The lady's glove section Some of the sentences are too long. Shorten Under collaboration 2nd sentence "also" 3rd sentence "also". Need to change one 4. Neutral language 5. Research noted, not speculation 6. Entry is assignable Mapfluger (talk) 07:31, 3 April 2014 (UTC)