Talk:Lake Manly/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Casliber (talk · contribs) 12:18, 15 February 2018 (UTC)

Hi, I am taking a look and making some straightforward copyedits as I go (please correct/revert me if I inadvertently change the meaning!). I'll jot questions/issues below: Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:18, 15 February 2018 (UTC)


 * Combine first and second sentences as they are a bit repetitive as is...why not, "Lake Manly was a pluvial lake in Death Valley, California, covering a surface area of 1600 km2 during the so-called "Blackwelder stand"." - also link "Blackwelder stand" here.
 * Done, but "Blackwelder stand" is not a separate article - are intra-article links fine? Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)


 * If possible, avoid having the first 3 lead paras starting "Lake Manly.."
 * Done, there were alternative terms. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)

The single sentence 4th para should be joined onto the 3rd.
 * Not sure about this ... may need some rewrite before it can be tacked on. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)
 * How about something like, "Lake Manly and other lake systems in the Great Basin formed by a process of decreasing temperatures and thus decreasing evaporation as well as increased precipitation during the ice ages." or something similar....
 * Done. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 14:55, 16 February 2018 (UTC)

*I'd combine first 2 sections into a single Discovery and naming section. Also combine single sentence paras :I think I got that one; I tend to construct paragraphs around a certain topic, not necessarily a certain length. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)


 * Add Levi F. Noble's occupation as a descriptor/adjective. Ditto Gilbert.
 * Added these, I don't think an inline citation is needed for their job description. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)


 * According to some evidence, a southeastward flowing river occupied northern Death Valley during the late Miocene - sounds vague. Describe the evidence
 * Explained a little more, using a rewording as the literal source text clast assemblages and facies within the 14–6 Ma Artists Drive Formation that are consistent with a northwest-to-southeast–flowing fluvial system during the late Miocene. is probably too technical. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)


 * The occurrence of lizards of the Uma family  - umm...Uma is a genus not a family...
 * Aye, fixed this. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)


 * Any info on any critters that appeared in the lake in 2005 when it reformed?
 * Didn't find anything... Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)


 * FWIW, Earwigs tool looks ok.

Anyway, over to you. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 12:43, 15 February 2018 (UTC)
 * Answered issues. Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 17:01, 15 February 2018 (UTC)
 * Second item addressed, Jo-Jo Eumerus (talk, contributions) 14:55, 16 February 2018 (UTC)

1. Well written?:
 * Prose quality:
 * Manual of Style compliance:

2. Factually accurate and verifiable?:
 * References to sources:
 * Citations to reliable sources, where required:
 * No original research:

3. Broad in coverage?:
 * Major aspects:
 * Focused:

4. Reflects a neutral point of view?:
 * Fair representation without bias:

5. Reasonably stable?
 * No edit wars, etc. (Vandalism does not count against GA):

6. Illustrated by images, when possible and appropriate?:
 * Images are copyright tagged, and non-free images have fair use rationales:
 * Images are provided where possible and appropriate, with suitable captions:

Overall:
 * Pass or Fail: - ok we're there. Cas Liber (talk · contribs) 23:24, 16 February 2018 (UTC)