Talk:Lamont Roach Jr./GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: MWright96 (talk · contribs) 13:41, 7 March 2021 (UTC)

Going to review this for the GAN March 2021 Backlog Drive. MWright96 (talk) 13:41, 7 March 2021 (UTC)
 * 1) It is reasonably well written.
 * a (prose): b (MoS for lead, layout, word choice, fiction, and lists):
 * 1) It is factually accurate and verifiable.
 * a (reference section): b (citations to reliable sources):  c (OR):
 * 1) It is broad in its coverage.
 * a (major aspects): b (focused):
 * 1) It follows the neutral point of view policy.
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) It is stable.
 * No edit wars, etc.:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * 1) It is illustrated by images and other media, where possible and appropriate.
 * a (images are tagged and non-free content have fair use rationales): b (appropriate use with suitable captions):
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass/Fail:
 * Pass/Fail:

Lead

 * It would be better for the lead to be more than just a single sentence in one paragraph such as adding more of Roach's achievements

Early life

 * Wikilink punching bag
 * "and learn some of the basics." - basics of boxing.
 * "his record was 125–15," - use the template on the text in bold to explain its meaning to non-boxer readers
 * "with two of those losses coming at the hands of Gervonta Davis." - coming from Gervonta Davis.
 * "both at 132 lbs." - use the template on the text in bold; also, the fact will need an extra reference to verify it
 * "He also captured a bronze medal" - claimed

Professional career

 * Be consistent in how unimaous decision is written in this section. For example, one sentence writes it as UD while another says unanimous decision
 * "Roach made his pro debut on April 19, 2014," - professional
 * Wikilink knockdown to the appropriate article on the first mention only for non-Boxing readers
 * "before the fight was stopped in the fourth round in his favor," - stopped by whom?
 * "he stopped Alejandro Valdez inside of two minutes in Indio, California" - source that cites this portion of text does not explicitly say Indio, California so another source will be needed to the one already existant to verify this
 * "Just days before his next fight, a non-title bout versus Dominican veteran Luis Hinojosa in October," - needs a reference to verify
 * Wikilink the first mention of the term card to Card (sports)
 * "his cousin and life-long trainer Bernard "Boogaloo" Roach passed away of a heart attack." - avoid using euphemisms per MOS:EUPHEMISM
 * "He received a shot at the vacant WBO International super featherweight title," - reword the text in bold to something more formal
 * "when Roach hit the Puerto Rican" - avoid using the nationality of his opponent
 * "to #5 in the WBO rankings." - please avoid using # per MOS:HASH
 * "to #2 in January 2019." - same issue as above
 * "he received his world title shot against" - use a more formal word instead of the one highlighted in bold

Professional boxing record

 * The tables are missing the scope="col"(s) from the columns so that it complies with MOS:DTT
 * The first column, the one starting with "22", will need to have a "|" added to the end of it for consistency