Talk:Language deprivation in children with hearing loss

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Critiques
For the main heading of the article, the first letter of each would should be capitalized, "Language Deprivation in Deaf and Hard of Hearing Children".

References 8 and 10 are not cited fully. Reference 8 is cited with just a link to a PDF version of the article. Reference 10 is cited with just a link to the website. Also, reference 10 is not a scholarly article. This article is part of an official website called ThoughtCo.

The last sentence in the section titled "Lack of Awareness" seems to be written with some bias. This sentence should be rewritten or add a reference supporting this statement.

In the paragraph titled "Access to Language", sentences 4 and 5 are describing the term "incidental learning". Adding the appropriate terminology will improve the overall quality of this statement.

AmyTai (talk) 07:30, 5 February 2018 (UTC)
 * (I'd like to lead with a statement that I would action some of these right now but it's late here.) Hi, you may want to familiarize yourself with the manual of style. Wikipedia headings use sentence case, not title case, including in titles of articles. (I realize the other headings in the article use title case, but it is in fact them that should be changed.) The references could use some fleshing out, probably with citation templates (they're both currently more or less bare links), but references aren't absolutely required to be scholarly articles. They just need to be reliable sources by Wikipedia's standards. (I haven't checked 10 to verify its reliability, though, so...) You're definitely right about the POV on the last sentence in the lack of awareness section; it should be sourced and rewritten or removed. The other section you mentioned is understandable as-is, but probably could be bolstered by your suggestion. - Purplewowies (talk) 09:00, 5 February 2018 (UTC)
 * I just went through and copyedited the article, which resulted in a lot of tags being added to the article. I didn't have time to apply the usual scrutiny I do to sources I'm fleshing out the references for, so I didn't do that part. (I also didn't add or remove things in the lack of awareness or language access sections, but that was more because I was only doing the "easy" part of copyediting (that is, making sure the existing grammar was done more in line with the manual of style, as opposed to clarifying anything myself).) - Purplewowies (talk) 18:17, 5 February 2018 (UTC)

Critique
Under the Access to Language section, the point "Early intervention services that provide sign to deaf and hard of hearing children result in those children achieving language early." needs a citation.

Jaxanderson (talk) 02:15, 6 February 2018 (UTC)

New section
"This is common[how often?] because they cannot access the world around them through auditory means."

I feel that language deprivation in DHH children is not the result of not accessing through auditory means so I feel that's misguiding. Instead, it's the result of not accessing through visual means which is naturally suited for Deaf and HH children.

Shana 02:46, 6 February 2018 (UTC)
 * It's really a consequence of not getting communication access through any means (visual/signed or auditory/spoken), but the sentence really needs a citation to back itself up anyway. (It mildly reads like WP:original research.) The lead is supposed to be a summary of the article content and doesn't outright require citations if the content is cited in the article, but the claim isn't super clearly backed up in the article text that's not the lead, so... - Purplewowies (talk) 04:41, 6 February 2018 (UTC)

Critiques 2018-02-16
There are quite a few references to "American" sign language, and statistics about the United States. Since Wikipedia has an international audience, these references should be expanded to include visual languages used elsewhere in the world, or should become discussions of modality, rather than writing about a particular language. It's important to ensure that there are citations relevant to the assertions, as well (so, research showing particular outcomes with ASL may not apply to populations using SgSL). — Preceding unsigned comment added by 159.65.130.174 (talk) 19:12, 16 February 2018 (UTC)
 * I've moved this to its own section because it was (accidentally, I assume) spliced into the top of a different section near the top of the page. - Purplewowies (talk) 19:45, 16 February 2018 (UTC)

Critiques and Reorganization
I reorganized the whole article along with the structure of sections and adding new sections to better describe and translate relevant research of language deprivation in deaf individuals. I also emphasized American Sign Language to ensure there was no confusion. There are other sources that provide similar findings in British Sign Language Research. I restructured the article to allow for flexibility of others to add these other areas of studies. I added a main section of American Deaf Education Philosophy but again other information, not related to America, can be added along with this with the new structure of the article. I also organized the article to allow for others to include the different perspectives of communication and education used. SarahLiz P3N (talk) 19:30, 16 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Moved to bottom of page to fix talk page layout. No edit or comment was made to its content other than to move it - Purplewowies (talk) 20:48, 16 April 2020 (UTC)

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I noticed that the second paragraph under the lead has some bias and does not encompass the entire spectrum of experience by those with a hearing loss. It also placed blame on the parents for the children's lack of language. Although parents are a key component, the actual issue is much more complex. Also, medical professionals do not provide misinformation. They provide information that is consistent with the WHO definition of impairment and disability. Thus, it is limited information and only consistent with a certain outlook which does not take into account the long term personal impact that hearing loss will have. Ronesiur (talk) 14:35, 31 October 2022 (UTC)
 * "Also, medical professionals do not provide misinformation." There is probably-reliably-sourceable (but not necessarily for sure sourceable) semi-common evidence of doctors providing actual misinformation (often in the form of something like suggesting a child who is learning to speak can never sign or speech will never happen, which is not backed by scientific evidence), though they're not supposed to provide misinformation, of course. But I would agree that it's probably far cleaner (and definitely-able-to-be-reliably-sourced) to note that it's often limited information (typically that which aligns with the medical model of disability and the idea of mitigation related to that model) rather than misinformation, yes. - Purplewowies (talk) 20:10, 31 October 2022 (UTC)

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Improvements to Prevention -> Conflicts and Controversies section
This section is flagged with a maintenance template for lack of reliable citations (and probably should have had a POV flag on it, as well). I made several changes, adding a new JEHDI source to replace the broken CDC source, removing unsubstantiated language (regarding business influences), and removing appeals to emotion to restore a neutral POV. Kerri9494 (talk) 19:28, 27 March 2023 (UTC)