Talk:Language education in Singapore/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Jaguar (talk · contribs) 10:36, 11 October 2014 (UTC)

Will leave some initial comments very soon and will focus on copyediting issues. Thanks! ☠ Jag  uar  ☠ 10:36, 11 October 2014 (UTC)

GA review – see WP:WIAGA for criteria


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * A. Prose is "clear and concise", without copyvios, or spelling and grammar errors:
 * B. MoS compliance for lead, layout, words to watch, fiction, and lists:
 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail:
 * Pass or Fail:

Lead

 * This is the biggest problem; the lead should be a minimum of three paragraphs for an article this size, summarising all the points in the article. At the moment it is comprised of two sentences and barely mentions any content in the article, for example the background, outcomes and every other section in the article.
 * This currently fails the GA criteria and if it were to comply per WP:LEAD it would definitely need an expansion

Background

 * "Singapore is a racially and linguistically diverse society" - this makes it sound like Singapore is a society and not a city-state!
 * "During British colonial rule" - from when was that?
 * "languages are no longer academic subjects and all content is taught in English" - unreferenced

Mother tongue

 * "In 1976, the MOE accepted a new Malay spelling system which Malaysia and Indonesia had adopted in 1973" - should this be in one of the tables?

Outcomes

 * "As Quentin Dixon[27] concluded," - ref after comma, and who is Quentin Dixon?

Close - not listed
I really hate having to do this (especially on the first go) but in its current standing the article does not meet the GA criteria and would need more work for it to reach a GA standard which cannot be done in this review. Seeing as this is its second review, I would recommend giving it a general copyedit and addressing all of those concerns above. If you'd like, once you have done that you could come and ask me again and I will review it again, saving a lot of time? I'd be happy to review it again. Regards ☠ Jag  uar  ☠ 18:42, 11 October 2014 (UTC)