Talk:Larry Hefner/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gonzo fan2007 (talk · contribs) 19:54, 20 October 2023 (UTC)

I'll review this one. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk)  @ 19:54, 20 October 2023 (UTC)

Comments
Looks good, putting on hold. « Gonzo fan2007 (talk)  @ 17:27, 23 October 2023 (UTC)
 * He was North Mecklenberg's second NFL alumni and was a two-way player for the school, being a linebacker on defense while a guard. -> adding "while on offense" would make this sentence make sense a bit more.
 * Done.
 * best linebackers in the county in the either say "his county" or state which county it is.
 * Changed to "his county"
 * he worked as a pit crew member for racers. can you clarify what type of "racers"? NASCAR? Semi-pro?
 * Clarified as NASCAR.
 * Ref spot check: #5, 7, 12, 16, 18, 22
 * BeanieFan11 (talk) 23:38, 23 October 2023 (UTC)
 * Looks good, passing. « Gonzo fan2007  (talk)  @ 00:14, 24 October 2023 (UTC)