Talk:Las Vegas Raiders/GA2

GA Review
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Reviewer: Secret account 03:22, 27 August 2010 (UTC)
 * OK I'm very close to failing the article, too many concerns but I'm going to give it a couple of days.
 * First of all the lead is just one paragraph, and mainly explains its record, the lead should be two to three paragraphs long and explain better.
 * "During their first three seasons, the Raiders struggled both on and off the field" Explain how they struggled.
 * In 1963, Al Davis was brought to the team as head coach and general manager, and from 1963 until 2002 the team had only seven losing seasons. Is that really needed in the lead, that they had only seven losing seasons. Sounds slanted towards a Raiders POV.
 * Early years should be expanded, what happened in 1961.
 * "and making for a 19–game losing streak from 1961 and 1962" should be sourced.
 * Sources one, two, five, 21, 25, 28, 32, 33, 36, 50, 51, 52, 56, 78, 79, 80, 86 are broken links.
 * Alot of links towards Dickey, Just Win, Baby, p. 41. etc, no ISBN number, no bibilography, no mention in cite book references
 * What makes HickokSports.com reliable?
 * Ref 40 and 48 is improperly cited
 * What makes ref 45 and 46, it's from a aol personal website, and source 57 (which is from the artist home page and improperly sourced), and source 90 reliable,
 * http://espn.go.com/sportsnation/quiz/_/id/3332 as a source? wow
 * About.com isn't a reliable source
 * Ref 87 is confusing.
 * Enter John Madden section is short, shouldn't have it's own subsection.
 * Why is Immaculate Reception in bold?
 * They beat the Dolphins in the divisional round of the playoffs in a see-saw battle before falling to the Steelers in the AFC Championship. see-saw battle?
 * In 1976, The Raiders beat Pittsburgh in a revenge match on the season opener and continued to cement its reputation for hard, dirty play by knocking WR Lynn Swann out for two weeks in a helmet-to-helmet collision. It doesn't mention in the article about it's reputation for hard and dirty play before that sentence came up.
 * Al Davis later tried to sue Steelers coach Chuck Knoll for libel after the latter called safety George Atkinson a criminal for the hit. Source?
 * Alot of missing wikilinks makes it confusing for the general reader FS? WR? I know what they mean but a person without knowledge of football doesn't.
 * Whole sections of the article is unsourced.
 * The team would not see a repeat performance in 1981, falling to 7-9 and a losing record for the first time since 1963. I saw earlier in the article that 1964 is a losing season.
 * "Reflecting on the last ten years during the post-game awards ceremony, Al Davis stated "...this was our finest hour, this was the finest hour in the history of the Oakland Raiders. To Tom Flores, the coaches, and the athletes: you were magnificent out there, you really were." [8] - seems unneeded already on a lengthy article.
 * Also 1986 saw Al Davis get into a widely publicized argument with RB Marcus Allen, whom he accused of faking injuries. source?
 * I'm not an expert in prose so I can't comment on that but I do see badly written, slang terms "were crushed" or sentences that needs more clafification.
 * The Todd Marinovich fiasco overshadowed the Raiders' 1991 and 1992 efforts. Marinovich was groomed from childhood to play football; his strict upbringing led to him being called "Robo QB" in the sports press. No source, and that should go on the Marinovich article not here.
 * I'm done for the night, I'll comment more tommorow Secret account 03:22, 27 August 2010 (UTC)