Talk:Laser Beam/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Carbrera (talk · contribs) 02:59, 19 May 2016 (UTC)

Infobox

 * The link to the album should be to "JPN (album)" instead of "JPN (Perfume album)"
 * You can remove the caption that reads "Laser Beam" artwork

Paragraph 1

 * Who described it as "an electronic song, influenced by 8-bit music"?

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 * Can you reword "shifting physical shipments" to "physical sales" or along that line?

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 * Reword second sentence to "It was also recorded, mixed, and mastered by Nakata."
 * "track list" --> "tracklist"

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 * Great work!

Composition

 * Again, who described it as "an electronic song, influenced by 8-bit music"?
 * No source for the lead sentence
 * Capitalize the "b" in "Laser beam" please
 * "groups" --> "group's"

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 * Nothing! Nada! :)

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 * You seem to use "positive" quite a bit, you could also say that they favored the single, enjoyed it, applauded it, etc....
 * You also use semi-colon marks a bit, you can cut it back a bit if possible please

Commercial performance

 * "groups" --> "group's"
 * Make sure plural matches nouns; "it" should be singular and "they" should be plural -- "in their second week of sales" for example.
 * "groups" --> "group's"
 * Again, could you reword "shifting physical shipments" to "physical sales" or along that line?

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 * "which appears on the making-up and clothes." --> "which is reflected in the makeup and clothing."

Synopsis

 * You did a great job at the synopsis; and at them in general–I have nothing to add! :)

Promotion and live performances

 * "Kasuka na Kaori" should be in quotation marks
 * "3%" should be spelt out as "three percent" please

Track listing

 * Change title to "Track listings and formats" please

End of GA Review:
Very few comments, great work! On hold as usual, good luck! Carbrera (talk) 02:32, 26 May 2016 (UTC)
 * Hi All done :) CaliforniaDreamsFan (talk &middot;&#32;contribs} 02:29, 28 May 2016 (UTC)