Talk:Lasioglossum cressonii

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Comments for 12/4/2015
Great job as always! I corrected words, added links, and fixed grammar. For example, I changed “apples trees” in the beginning to “apple trees” and linked it. In the taxonomy section, I changed “not any known fossils” to “no known fossils” and combined the words “sub” and “categories” to make “subcategories”. I made the description section clearer like changing piceous to glossy brownish black. I made minor corrections in the Colony cycle section like switching “males more” to “more males” and in the Eusocial behavior section like getting rid of “work to” from “They work to allocate”. I also added commas and links in the diet section. Also you have a phrase “the punctures are more less dense”. Is it more or less dense? But, anyway keep up the good work! Raymundo.marcelo (talk) 17:52, 4 December 2015 (UTC)

Comments and Changes Made 9/27/2015
The Lasioglossum cressonii entry provided some interesting facts and was a good start for a more detailed entry in the future. Although there was some grammatical issues, the writing was condense and very accessible for a wider audience. I was very interested in the effects of logging on this bee species and had no idea that logging actually increased diversity of this species. I did a lot of editing to both the structure and information of this paper. I first edited the descriptive overview to include more taxonomy information and re-wrote two sentences to help the paragraph connect better. Lastly, I added a sentence discussing the bee’s pollination habits to make the reader more excited about this entry and linked eusocial as it is the first time it was mentioned. Throughout the whole paper I rewrote the species name as “L. Cressonii” which was a stylistic change that helped the entry look more professional. Within the “Taxonomy” section, I linked the family name so the readers could use these other entries as references. Within the “Description and Identification” section, I linked many different parts of the bee’s anatomy, including ocelli, scutellum and clypeal. Without providing any explanation for these words, the reader would have a very difficult time understanding distinctive features. I also rewrote a few sentences to ensure that the reader understood what anatomical regions were being referred to. Within the “Colony Cycle” section, I linked diapause, overwintering and gyne. I linked these words because the small section is essentially meaningless without understanding these concepts. I also linked spermathecal within the "Mating Behavior" section so the readers could get a clearer understanding of its function. Lastly within the “Diet” section, I italicized all the names of the pollinated plant species just to make the article seem more professional and trustworthy to the readers. Helenaxeros (talk) 21:16, 27 September 2015 (UTC)

Peer Review
Overall, I liked the article. It was well organized and there was a lot of good, verifiable information. The colony cycle was particularly thorough. As for constructive criticism, I would try and add an interesting piece of information to the introduction that catches the reader’s attention. Is there anything in particular about this bee that makes it unique or particularly fascinating? As well, there is room to expand the information in the “Eusocial Behavior” section, as many of the subsections have only one or two sentences.

I edited several aspects of the article, including grammar, spelling, organization, and structure, and content. I added a picture of the species from a copyrighted image from Discover Life. I also added a range of where the species are commonly found, also from Discover Life.

I fixed some spelling and grammar, such as capitalizing the Genus name in the taxonomy box. Further corrections include changing the phrase in the introduction paragraph from “how many subgenera there are” to “how many subgenera exist” and so on throughout the article. I just made the phrasing a bit more concise. There were also a few incidents throughout the article where the species name was not italicized, so I fixed that as well. As well, I made some corrections, such as changing the phrase ‘through out’ to ‘throughout’.

Structurally, I bolded the species name to start the article and included the founder and the date he founded the species in parenthesis. I also went through the article and added a bunch of hyperlinks so that if the reader wants to learn more about a topic, they have the opportunity to pursue this information easily. Further, some of the hyperlinks did not connect to the correct pages; for example, the hyperlink for the man who discovered the species, Charles Robertson, connected us to the disambiguation page. I went through and corrected this mistake as well as a few other hyperlinks. Kevin.george1 (talk) 03:40, 2 October 2015 (UTC)

I edited a few grammar points, and reorganized the beginning sentence of the Colony Cycle section to flow better as it was rather redundant. Overall you have some really great and verifiable information. I also hyperlinked important words of surrounding the species, such as its family and genus. You could possible condense some of your shorter sections or add to them in the future, as some are only one or two sentences long such as Behavioral information on Queens, Foundresses, and Dominance Hierarchy. Wdsieling (talk) 23:40, 1 October 2015

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