Talk:Last Dance (Dua Lipa song)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kyle Peake (talk · contribs) 11:54, 21 July 2020 (UTC)

Giving a review very quickly after nomination by taking this one on! --Kyle Peake (talk) 11:54, 21 July 2020 (UTC)

Infobox and lead
✅
 * Put (deluxe edition) in brackets after the album's title in the infobox
 * Add streaming next to Digital download with the appropriate target
 * Target Stephen Kozmeniuk to Koz (record producer)
 * "Dua Lipa, included on the deluxe edition of her 2017 eponymous debut studio album." → "Dua Lipa from the deluxe edition of her eponymous debut studio album (2017)."
 * "and it's producer" → "and its producer"
 * Remove the about part of the sentence from here; I will set it for a different area of the lead below
 * "was released for digital download on 9 February 2016 through Lipa's independent record label," → "was released for digital download and streaming on 9 February 2016 through" with the appropriate target
 * "after premiering on" → "after having premiered on"
 * ""Last Dance" is a" → "It is a"
 * "song with a" → "song that features a"
 * Next sentence should be "Lyrically, the song is about..." with mention of its lyrical meaning
 * "received critical acclaim from" → "received acclaim from"
 * "peaked at number 4" → "peaked at number four" per MOS:NUM
 * "It received a music video that premiered on" → "An accompanying music video premiered via"
 * "by Jon Brewer and Ian Blair and" → "by both Jon Brewer and Ian Blair, and was"
 * Remove wikilink on California
 * "and she promoted the single with numerous live performances," → "and was promoted by her with numerous live performances in 2016,"

Background and composition

 * "and Stephen Kozmeniuk, with the latter of the three also handling the" → "and Koz, with the latter of the three solely handling" with the target
 * "They wrote it in" → "They wrote the song in"
 * "in Toronto after Lipa" → "in Toronto, after Lipa"
 * Are you sure "success" is the correct term here? Gives the impression it had already been released by 2014; also, add the song's release year in brackets.
 * Changed to "sound"

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 * "writing session of the day and she" → "writing session in a day and Lipa"
 * "how she was able to capture" → "being able to capture"
 * "she recalls that moment." → "Lipa recalls that moment."
 * "but after hearing the finished" → "though after hearing the finished"
 * "She stated that it → "Lipa stated that it"
 * "she would take it to producers" → "she would take to producers"
 * Add timedtext to the sample
 * Wikilink pre-chorus to itself on the audio sample main text per MOS:LINK2SECT
 * "It begins slowly with Lipa" → "The track begins slowly, with Lipa"
 * "The track builds up to" → "It builds up to"
 * "is mostly instrumental, with" → "is mostly instrumental, featuring"
 * "It has a" → "The track has a"

Release and promotion

 * "on 8 February 2016 on" → "on 8 February 2016 via"
 * "was released for digital download" → "was released for digital download and streaming" with the target
 * "Dua Lipa Limited as the third single" → "Dua Lipa Limited, as the third single" with the target
 * Remove target on eponymous debut studio album
 * "in the United Kingdom" → "stations in the United Kingdom"
 * "It also received remixes" → ""Last Dance" also received remixes"
 * "on Lipa's eponymous debut studio album, but" → "on the album but"
 * Move the img to being at the top of the music video sub-section instead
 * "with Jaguar titled" → "with [[Jaguar Cars|Jaguar], titled"
 * Are you sure punctuation should be inside quotes for the title?
 * Put outside quote.

✅
 * "at the Eurosonic festival for that year" → "at the Eurosonic festival"
 * "on the set list Lipa's" → "on the set list for Lipa's"
 * Add the tour's year in brackets
 * Mention what year the MTV performance was
 * "the song during her MTV Setlist show" → "the song for her MTV Setlist show"

Music video
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 * "by Jon Brewer and Ian Blair and" → "by Jon Brewer alongside Ian Blair, while"
 * "It premiered on" → "It premiered to YouTube on"
 * "was filmed in December 2015" → "was filmed during December 2015"
 * "of California. Lipa recalled that" → "of California, with Lipa recalling that"
 * "really cold there" → "really cold in the state"
 * "The video opens with Lipa" → "It opens with Lipa"
 * "she is seen wearing a black bra with" → "Lipa is seen wearing a black bra and"
 * "At times, the visuals" → "At multiple points, the visuals"
 * Target 3D to an appropriate page
 * "looped fragment as well as" → "looped fragment, as well as"
 * "as a nod to her" → "for nodding to her"

Reception
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 * "received critical acclaim from" → "was met with acclaim from"
 * "Lipa's vocal flexibility writing her" → "Lipa's vocal flexibility, writing her"
 * "For Pulse Media, Jessica Boyle" → "Writing for Pulse Media, Jessica Boyle"
 * "categorize the lyrics as "standalone"" → "categorized the lyrics as "standalone,""
 * Remove target on club
 * "the song's production and lyric mix as well as" → "the song's production and lyrics mix, while"
 * "called it a" → "called "Last Dance" a"
 * "to Justin Bieber's Purpose and" → "to Justin Bieber's Purpose (2015), and"
 * "compared the song to" → "compared the song to the music of"
 * Remove second wikilink on Major Lazer
 * Target The 405 to The 405 (magazine)
 * "and "infectious" with" → "and "infectious," with"
 * "on Billboard's Twitter Emerging Artists chart, where it spent seven weeks." → "on the US Billboard Twitter Emerging Artists chart, lasting for seven weeks on the chart."

Track listings
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 * Digital download → Digital download / streaming
 * Digital download – Remixes → Digital download / streaming – Remixes

Credits and personnel
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 * Recording and Personnel should be separated with subheadings, not subsections
 * Target Metropolis Studios to Metropolis Group
 * Use so there is the right space between credits and personnel

Release history
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 * Add streaming for both of the digital download releases

Final comments and verdict

 * There appears to have been some reverting of edits, but it was not close together so I do believe the article is stable and am placing it, good luck! --Kyle Peake (talk) 15:22, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks, I have addressed all your comments. LOVI  33  23:13, 22 July 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for the quick response, did some brief copy editing but ✅ now! --Kyle Peake (talk) 07:15, 23 July 2020 (UTC)