Talk:Last Day in Florida/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Gen. Quon (talk · contribs) 04:05, 17 March 2012 (UTC)

Issues:
 * Intro: "Robert California (James Spader) reveals he hates Nellie's business plan, Jim (John Krasinski) swings into action to keep Dwight (Rainn Wilson) from getting fired." I would put an 'and' between 'plan' and 'Jim'
 * Intro: Mentioned the cookies plot
 * Plot: I think 'reverted' would fit better than 'returned' when talking about Stanley, but that's really just me
 * Watch contractins, like 'won't' and 'hasn't'
 * Production: You use the term 'the episode also marks the..." about three times. Cut this down and change up the wording so the prose doesn't get repetitive
 * References: Ref 5 needs writer and director info; Ref 16 needs publisher date

That's really all. Fix these up an I will pass the article. On hold for seven days.--Gen. Quon (talk) 16:41, 17 March 2012 (UTC)
 * Everything has been fixed! I pass.--Gen. Quon (talk) 01:33, 18 March 2012 (UTC)