Talk:Launch Party/GA1

GA Review
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Looking good, with just a few suggestions:
 * Unbold quotes around episode title.
 * Dwight Schrute (Rainn Wilson) decides to compete against the Web site -- use "website" to keep consistency.
 * When it is his turn to appear at the party via webcam -- maybe make it clear here that this is the main Dunder Mifflin party, not the Scranton party.
 * Okay, how about now? -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)


 * Eventually Michael has an epiphany about the fact that he's committed a crime -- how about "Eventually Michael has an epiphany, realizing that he has committed a crime"?
 * Changed -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)


 * She doesn't answer, but stifles a smile -- "does not".
 * Changed -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)


 * According to Jennifer Celotta, the idea for the intro scene came -- firstly, "intro" isn't really an encyclopedic word, and secondly, readers who haven't seen the episode have no idea what happens in the scene. Maybe give a brief description.
 * Changed -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)


 * were arguing about whether it will ever hit the corner -- "whether it would".
 * Changed -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)


 * Maybe link five o'clock shadow for those who aren't familiar with the term.
 * Linked -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)


 * Also link Creed.
 * Done -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)


 * a 8% Share -- "an".
 * Fixed -- Mr.crabby    (Talk)   18:32, 2 August 2008 (UTC)

Otherwise, I think we're all good. You've got seven days to make changes, so good luck! — 97198   talk  02:19, 2 August 2008 (UTC)
 * Everything's good; the only issue still standing is the bold quotation marks (I couldn't find that in writing anywhere but it's definitely a rule of thumb I'm aware of) but I'll fix that myself in a minute, right after I pass the article :) — 97198   talk  07:52, 3 August 2008 (UTC)