Talk:Laurence of Canterbury/GA1

GA Review
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A few bits aren't clear to me. No suprises there I guess, given my almost complete ignorance of medieval English history:


 * I think the Gregorian mission mentioned in the lead needs just a word or two of explanation, such as "... to convert the Anglo-Saxons to Christianity", or similar.
 * Clarified. Ealdgyth - Talk 17:45, 6 March 2009 (UTC)


 * "He was consecrated archbishop during the lifetime of his predecessor, Augustine of Canterbury. He continued efforts to coordinate with the native bishops of Britain, although his efforts were unsuccessful." I'd dearly love to combine these two sentences in some way, but I just don't understand what they're saying. So there were two Archbishops of Canterbury for a time? Who consecrated Laurence? Continued Augustine's efforts? "Coordinate with the native bishops"? In what way was he unsuccessful?


 * It now reads "He was consecrated archbishop by his predecessor, Augustine of Canterbury during Augustine's lifetime, in order to ensure there was continuity in the office. He made efforts to resolve differences with the native bishops of Britain by writing to them about points of dispute, but his efforts were unsuccessful." (Have I mentioned lately I HATE leads?) Ealdgyth - Talk 17:45, 6 March 2009 (UTC)


 * "Laurence was accompanied by Peter, sometime between July 598 and June 601." Accompanied where? To Rome? That's a pretty wide timespan.
 * Rewrote, see how that looks now. Ealdgyth - Talk 18:51, 6 March 2009 (UTC)


 * I'm still not sure I understand what "native bishops" means.
 * "Laurence also wrote to the bishops in the lands held by the Scots and by the Britons,..." that's what it is in the body. Any suggestions on how to phrase it in the lead? Ealdgyth - Talk 18:51, 6 March 2009 (UTC)

--Malleus Fatuorum 18:15, 6 March 2009 (UTC)

Sorry for the delay; I've listed this article as a GA now. --Malleus Fatuorum 21:09, 9 March 2009 (UTC)