Talk:Law Commission of India/GA1

GA Review
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I am going to review this article. Kensplanet (talk) 18:49, 4 September 2008 (UTC)

I can see that lot of efforts have been put into this article. But I am afraid I won't be able to list it as a GA.

Checkout the Good article criteria here.

(1). Well written: '''1 (a). the prose is clear and the spelling and grammar are correct; and''' I checked the article and couldn't find spelling mistakes easily. But the prose is very poor. It is explained below in EXAMPLES OF POOR PROSE 1 (a). So 1 (a). is not satisfied. '''1 (b). it complies with the manual of style guidelines for lead sections, layout, jargon, words to avoid, fiction, and list incorporation.'''
 * The article fails here. According to WP:LEAD, the lead should be a condensed replica of the main prose. In the Lead, you mention about its formation, the different Law commissions but where is the Role, Working in the Lead. That needs to be fixed.
 * Some terms like ad hoc in the Lead may be jargon for some people.
 * There are many instances of peacock terms employed. Here are a few (check the striked terms):
 * The origin of the first Law Commission of India lies in the diverse and often conflicting laws prevailing in the local regions and those administered by the East India Company,
 * The fact that a number of its reports have been taken receptively by the various Ministries and have been worked upon to change the legal scenario, is itself an indicator sufficient enough of the role of the Commission in furtherance of law reform in India.
 * he Commission works upon the assigned agenda and primarily comes up with research based reports, often conclusive and recommendatory.
 * There may be many more but enough to give you an idea about what terms should be avoided.

(2). Factually accurate and verifiable: 

'''2 (a). it provides references to all sources of information, and at minimum contains a section dedicated to the attribution of those sources in accordance with the guide to layout;'''

'''2 (b). at minimum, it provides in-line citations from reliable sources for direct quotations, statistics, published opinion, counter-intuitive or controversial statements that are challenged or likely to be challenged, and contentious material relating to living persons; and''' Remember Wikipedia is not a reliable source and as such should never be used as inline citations. So remove immediately '''2 (c). it contains no original research.'''

(3). Broad in its coverage: 

'''3 (a). it addresses the main aspects of the topic; and''' '''3 (b). it stays focused on the topic without going into unnecessary detail'''

'''(4). Neutral: it represents viewpoints fairly and without bias. '''

(5). Stable: it does not change significantly from day-to-day because of an ongoing edit war or content dispute.

(6). Illustrated, if possible, by images:

6 (a) images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content; and  '''6 (b). images are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions'''
 * Major concern is that I cannot see any images here. You have to put in Images if this article wants to attain FA status. Even images of Lord Bentick will do, provided they are relevant.

EXAMPLES OF POOR PROSE 1 (a)
 * Law Commission of India is an executive body established by an order of the Government of India. Its purpose is primarily to work for legal reform as entrusted to it by the Government or suo motu as it may deem fit. The Law Commission is an ad hoc body comprising primarily of legal experts entrusted with a particular mandate by the Government and for a fixed tenure. It was first established during the British regime in 1834 by the Charter Act of 1833. After that three more Commissions were established in pre-independent India. After the independence of India in 1947, the First Law Commission was established in 1955 for a three year term. Since then seventeen more Commissions have been established and the current Law Commission, established on 2006-09-01 is the Eighteenth Law Commission of India whose tenure has been fixed till 2009-08-31. The current Chairman of the Law Commission is Justice A. R. Lakshmanan who is a Former Judge of the Supreme Court of India. Other than him, the current Law Commission has one Permanent Member, one Member-Secretary and six Part-time Members.

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 * Law Commission of India is an executive body established by the Government of India, whose primary purpose is to work for legal reform as entrusted to it by the Government. It is an ad hoc body comprising primarily of legal experts. It was first established during the British regime in 1834 by the Charter Act of 1833. After that three more Commissions were established in pre-independent India. After India's independence in 1947, the First Law Commission was established in 1955. Since then seventeen more Commissions have been established and the current Law Commission, is the Eighteenth Law Commission of India. The current Chairman of the Law Commission is Justice A. R. Lakshmanan. Other than him, the current Law Commission has one Permanent Member, one Member-Secretary and six Part-time Members.

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''I am sure you must have got the difference: You have taken the Lead into too. much details. The Lead should just introduce the topic. Main contents should be in the main prose.''


 * Law Commission of India, though an ad hoc body, has been a key instrumentality in the process of law reform in India. Its role has not only been advisory but also critical of the government policies and has been recognized by the Supreme Court of India and also the academia as pioneering and prospective. In a number of decisions the Supreme Court has referred to the work done by the Law Commission and followed its recommendations. The fact that the Chairman of the Law Commission is generally a retired Judge of the Supreme Court has only helped the prominence of the Commission.

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 * Law Commission of India, though an ad hoc body, has been instrumental in the process of law reforms in India. Its plays an critical role in the implementation of government policies. It has been recognized by the Supreme Court of India and the academia. In a number of decisions the Supreme Court has referred to the Law Commission and followed its recommendations.


 * The power vested in the Commission to suo motu take up matters for discussion and submit recommendations has also worked well to the advantage of the legal system in the country. The history of the Commission is replete with such recommendations which have been made in the wake of the hour and where the law has needed change. Further, the Commission has been often returned to review its earlier reports in the wake of changed scenarios and the aptness of law in such situations. Euthanasia and related issues, in particular, has been one such area where the Commission has been relook the situation at least three times, with the latest being its 196th report on the topic.

Besides the Law Ministry, the Commission has also been requested to work upon specific issues and submit its views by the Supreme Court on various occasions. The latest in regard has been the 205th Report of the Commission which has been prepared in view of the Supreme Court's request for assistance in determination of "certain legal issues relating to child marriage, and the different ages at which a person is defined as a child in different laws." The Report stirred a public debate in India for recommending inter alia, a reduction in marriage age of boys to be at par with girls at 18, instead of the long continuing 21 and 18 respectively.

With all its past and present works being continuously provided on the internet, the Commission has also provided a firm assistance to legal research in the country. The fact that a number of its reports have been taken receptively by the various Ministries and have been worked upon to change the legal scenario, is itself an indicator sufficient enough of the role of the Commission in furtherance of law reform in India.

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 * The Government has vested many powers in the Commission such as taking up judicial matters for discussion and submitting recommendations based on it. The Commission accounts for many such recommendations made in the past. Further, the Commission has been often entrusted with reviewing its earlier reports in some situations. Euthanasia and related issues, has been one such area which the Commission has relooked atleast three times, the latest being its 196th report on the topic.

Besides the Law Ministry, the Commission has also been requested to work upon specific issues by the Supreme Court on various occasions. The latest has been the 205th Report of the Commission which has been prepared in view of the Supreme Court's request for assistance in determination of "certain legal issues relating to child marriage, and the different ages at which a person is defined as a child in different laws." The Report stirred a public debate in India for recommending marriage limit of boys to be at par with girls at 18, instead of 21.

The Commission has also provided assistance to legal research and law reforms in the country. This has been highlighted by the number of reports taken by the various Ministries which have been worked upon to change the legal scenario.

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 * So you see the difference. I don't say this is the best revision. But quite comfortable to read.

I recommend listing this article at WP:PR or if you think there's something wrong in my review, then please resubmit this article at WP:GAN again. Hope to see this aricle at GAN very soon. Thanks, Kensplanet (talk) 20:18, 4 September 2008 (UTC)