Talk:Lawrence Sabatini/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: CaroleHenson (talk · contribs) 04:20, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Hello, I am looking forward to performing a review of this article. My approach is to review each section, make minor edits as I go along (links, punctuation, etc.) to save us both time and effort, and then assess the article against GA criteria. Feel free to revert edits that I make if you disagree.–CaroleHenson (talk) 04:20, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Introduction and infobox

 * The intro looks good and is a well-written summary of his life.
 * If you are interested the 2nd and 3rd infoboxes could be embedded in the main infobox. I am happy to help with that if you like.
 * I prefer keeping them separate, but thanks for the offer of help. Of course, if there's consensus that those infoboxes should be embedded together, then I will kindly take you up on it. —Bloom6132 (talk) 11:42, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * That's fine.–CaroleHenson (talk) 15:56, 27 April 2020 (UTC)


 * I may come back to this section after completing the other sections.–CaroleHenson (talk) 04:44, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Early life
The section looks good. I made a few minor tweaks: a link to Northwest Side, formatted the brother's names like the sister's for consistency, and a minor edit. See the edits here. Feel free to revert or modify as you wish.–CaroleHenson (talk) 04:52, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Presbyteral ministry
Looks good. I have no comments or suggestions.–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:40, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Auxiliary bishop of Vancouver (1978–1982)

 * This section looks good, too!–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:43, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Bishop of Kamloops (1982–1999)

 * This section looks good!–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:50, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I piped a link to Holy See for "see".
 * This was reverted as an inappropriate link.–CaroleHenson (talk) 06:43, 27 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Are there any reported outcomes for Sabatini's work on behalf of the First Nations?–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:50, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Haven't been able to find any. And the process of reconciliation between church and First Nations groups is still ongoing (ref for another article I'm planning to take to GA ). —Bloom6132 (talk) 11:42, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I am interested in reading that article. Isn't it interesting that after all the years of attempting to indoctrinate people that one "sorry" is enough and any further discourse about the wrong doing is deemed unnecessary.–CaroleHenson (talk) 16:00, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Retirement

 * For the parenthetical, is "in" needed?–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:54, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Changed. —Bloom6132 (talk) 11:42, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Published books

 * It is not a big deal, but since he is listed as the author for all the books, his name could be removed from the book info, this would put the year towards the end of the citation.–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:57, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Agreed – removed. —Bloom6132 (talk) 11:42, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

General comments

 * The article is shorter than most good articles. That's fine if this is a good summary of his key milestones and noteworthy activities. I am going to see if there is some other content to consider for him.–CaroleHenson (talk) 05:57, 27 April 2020 (UTC) Perhaps there is some useful content here:
 * This source said he led pilgrimages to the Holy Land.–CaroleHenson (talk) 06:15, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Perhaps there is some useful information in this newspaper clipping about his work with the First Nations.–CaroleHenson (talk) 06:23, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you for those sources. I will have a look at them in detail soon and incorporate them into the article. —Bloom6132 (talk) 11:42, 27 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Here is a diff of the minor edits that I made. Please revert anything you don't agree with.–CaroleHenson (talk) 06:25, 27 April 2020 (UTC)

Comments

 * The article is very well-written and is very close to passing as a GA article.
 * Please review this copy vio report for paraphrasing opportunities, such as major portions of sentences with content from the source, 4 or 5+ words from the source — that are not titles or quotations.
 * Gave it a thorough read-through. All of them seem to fall under WP:LIMITED.  One that I could possibly change is " pastor of St. Stephen's Parish" → " parish priest of St. Stephen's Parish", but I prefer limiting word repetition (espc. words that are "close by"). —Bloom6132 (talk) 11:49, 27 April 2020 (UTC)


 * As mentioned above: It would be nice to round out the article a bit more on key milestones or outcomes from his work.
 * Agreed. I will get to that in the next day or two. —Bloom6132 (talk) 11:52, 27 April 2020 (UTC)


 * There are no images in the article. It would be nice to have an image of him that is in the public domain... or perhaps a church that he served or First Nations or other images that relate to his efforts.–CaroleHenson (talk) 06:40, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * I've tried searching Flickr (no images available) and Google Images (4 images) – in fact, before I nominated for GAN. Hard to find any photos, unfortunately, let alone ones that are free use. —Bloom6132 (talk) 11:42, 27 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Two thoughts,, about your comments here. I think that I could paraphrase some of the content. Do you mind if I try? (As an FYI, I rewrote the WP:Close paraphrasing page years ago. - The best example of limited number of ways of saying things is like "He died on x date"). And, I would like to see if I can find some images, perhaps of the churches that he served, etc. on commons. Do you mind if I try?–CaroleHenson (talk) 16:06, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Would not mind you trying re photos and paraphrasing. As for the latter, most of them are proper titles of organizations or positions he held, and those should not be changed. —Bloom6132 (talk) 21:47, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , Okay, I will get to it. Of course, I won't change his titles. I will give you a diff when I am done to show what was changed.–CaroleHenson (talk) 23:22, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thanks for adding the Cathedral image – I've changed it to a newer, higher quality one. Sorry I didn't see the parts earlier where you said images could also be of the churches, not just of him. —Bloom6132 (talk) 23:42, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Cool. I was trying to pick one different than the article. That was my first choice, too.–CaroleHenson (talk) 23:45, 27 April 2020 (UTC)
 * , I made 2 edits. There weren't other changes without creating other problems. See what you think, feel free to edit.–CaroleHenson (talk) 00:00, 28 April 2020 (UTC)

The article is good and passes as a good article. Thanks so much for your work on it.–CaroleHenson (talk) 00:02, 28 April 2020 (UTC)
 * – Just added the last bit of info about his pilgrimages and trips. Hope that checks out alright. —Bloom6132 (talk) 00:08, 28 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Also, I prefer the subject at the start of the sentence. But I reworded it so his birth place came before his birth date. —Bloom6132 (talk) 00:14, 28 April 2020 (UTC)
 * Thank you for your review! I greatly appreciate it. —Bloom6132 (talk) 00:15, 28 April 2020 (UTC)


 * Yes, I saw your changes. The new content looks good. It wasn't going to change whether the article passed or failed, but are nice additions. I understand your points about the copyvio edits.


 * You are welcome for review. It was my pleasure.–CaroleHenson (talk) 00:20, 28 April 2020 (UTC)