Talk:Lawrence Weathers/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Freikorp (talk · contribs) 13:59, 1 September 2017 (UTC)


 * 1) Is it reasonably well written?
 * "he completed his schooling then obtained work as" - I think this would read better as 'completed his schooling before obtaining work'.✅
 * "On 10 September 1913, he" - this sentence has too many commas. Reword or split into two sentences.✅
 * "who was wounded on 10 June, suffering a gunshot wound to the leg" - two appearances of 'wound' so close together doesn't read well. Suggest just dropping the second mention as it is unnecessary anyway.✅
 * "succeeded in bottling up about 150 of them" - I'm not really sure what bottling means exactly in this context.✅ contained, in this context.
 * "He was also festooned 'like a Christmas tree'" - who actually said this? Depending on who it was it might be of interest.
 * Unclear what the origin is, the quote is from the author of his entry in the Aust Dictionary of Biography, Ritchie.


 * 1) Is it factually accurate and verifiable?
 * A. Has an appropriate reference section:
 * B. Citation to reliable sources where necessary:
 * C. No original research:
 * 1) Is it broad in its coverage?
 * A. Major aspects:
 * B. Focused:
 * 1) Is it neutral?
 * Fair representation without bias:
 * 1) Is it stable?
 * No edit wars, etc:
 * 1) Does it contain images to illustrate the topic?
 * A. Images are tagged with their copyright status, and valid fair use rationales are provided for non-free content:
 * B. Images are provided if possible and are relevant to the topic, and have suitable captions:
 * 1) Overall:
 * Pass or Fail: A very interesting and well written article. Looking forward to passing this once minor issues are addressed. Freikorp (talk) 14:17, 1 September 2017 (UTC)
 * All done, let me know what you think about the rewording? Thanks for the review, ! Peacemaker67 (click to talk to me) 02:37, 2 September 2017 (UTC)
 * Looks good do me. Happy for this to pass now. Well done. Freikorp (talk) 05:39, 2 September 2017 (UTC)