Talk:LeRoy Prinz/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Taylor Trescott (talk · contribs) 02:51, 3 July 2014 (UTC)

I'll do this one. Time to cut the "media and drama" backlog.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 02:51, 3 July 2014 (UTC)
 * The lead should only be 2 paragraphs per WP:LEAD.
 * It also should be rejigged. Prinz had 3 Oscar nominations; this should be one of the first things mentioned and yet it's not there.
 * Lead should use his middle name
 * "Leroy Jerome Prinz" not LeRoy?
 * ""introducing the American strut step" only needs one "
 * "during World War I" you said this earlier in the paragraph
 * Why does the Career section not mention his three Oscar nominations?
 * His Golden Globe win is also not mentioned
 * Two paragraphs in "Career" are not sourced
 * Any info on his personal life? IMDB says he had a kid named LeRoy Jr.

Overall I think this is close to meeting the GA criteria and will place it on hold.  Taylor Trescott  - my talk + my edits 21:27, 3 July 2014 (UTC)

✅ Thanks very much for reviewing this. Coretheapple (talk) 13:39, 8 July 2014 (UTC)