Talk:Leave It to Beaver (Veronica Mars)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Courcelles (talk) 18:14, 27 July 2010 (UTC)

Sorry this took so long, I'll try to get my commentary up today so this can end somewhat sooner than it sat on GAN. Courcelles (talk) 18:14, 27 July 2010 (UTC)


 * Sourcing
 * Bare URL has to be formatted
 * Date format. Pick one and stick to it.
 * Ref 10; you're using the wrong template- this should be cite news, with the Roanoke Times given as the newspaper, whoever owns them as the publisher, and the Detroit Free Press as the agency
 * What is Give me my Remote, and why is it a WP:RS?


 * Dab Links
 * Two- GHB and Michael Fields.


 * Media
 * Non-free rationale needs strengthening for the infobox image. My inclination is that a suitable rationale can be written, but what you have now is far too boilerplate
 * Other image is fine

Thanks for the comments (and for reviewing)! I have gone through and tried to fix the issues raised thus far. I'm not too sure about the rationale of the infobox image, but I've given it a go. Also, I didn't think that GMMR was reliable, and that's why I didn't bother to format it. It's been removed. Thanks,  Corn.u. co.pia  •  Disc.u s.sion   15:52, 28 July 2010 (UTC)


 * Characters should probably be referred to by first and last name on first mention- see FA's What Is and What Should Never Be (Supernatural) and Once More, with Feeling (Buffy the Vampire Slayer).
 * "praised Thomas's use" is s's a regional thing? Normal practice is to omit the second s in such situations.
 * WP:LEAD- the lead is not supposed to contain information only found there. The third paragraph might be better suited for a background section.
 * The plot section reads as completely disorganised. Further, as someone who never watched this show, I have no idea what is going on. I hate to take you back to the same thing, but look at "Once More...". Background sections can be controversial, but since you're describing the end of a year's plot here, you need something that doesn't throw the reader in the deep end.
 * First time you use a dollar sign, link it like this: $; because there are many, many dollars out there.
 * "found the finale to be "breathlessly paced"." Duplicate citations after every quote, please. (Though you'll get in trouble more for this at FAC, it should still be done.)

Honestly the big issue is that this article is written too heavily towards the demographic that have seen the prior 21 episodes, and leaves those who haven't out in the cold. Courcelles 02:33, 7 August 2010 (UTC)
 * I've added a background section (while half-asleep), so hopefully it has made things a lot clearer. If any inconsistencies have arisen please let me know.  Corn.u. co.pia  •  Disc.u s.sion   15:04, 7 August 2010 (UTC)


 * Nicely done. It all makes much more sense now :)   Passed, though I'll offer the advice that you not rush to take this to FAC; at a minimum the prose would need ironing out and the reception section expanded; it does meet the GA criteria. Courcelles 04:58, 10 August 2010 (UTC)