Talk:Legal Services Corp. v. Velazquez/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Ironholds (talk) 01:51, 23 January 2011 (UTC)

✅ Please tell me if there is anything else I should change and thanks for reviewing. :) Lord Roem (talk) 18:32, 23 January 2011 (UTC) ✅ - Lord Roem (talk) 19:21, 23 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Lead sections should normally have a maximum of 3 sections; recommend consolidating the existing ones.
 * "The district court denied an injunction. This was later affirmed in part and reversed in part by the United States Court of Appeals for the Second Circuit; it upheld other restrictions that were challenged but held that the welfare advocacy restriction was unconstitutional" - explain the Court of Appeals judgment more fully.
 * "he court also attacked the fact that the restriction functionally barred participation of attorneys in the courts, as an effect of preventing certain cases from being filed" - this needs to be clarified and explained for the layman.
 * "Justice Scalia dissented from the decision of the court, primarily believing that Rust mandated a ruling upholding the restriction." - "Justice Scalia dissented from the decision of the court, primarily due to a belief that Rust mandated a ruling upholding the restriction."
 * Merge the two paragraphs in "Reaction".
 * "The Legal Services Corporation said they would "immediately review our regulations and then modify them to adhere to the Court's ruling"" - "The Legal Services Corporation said they would "immediately review [their] regulations and then modify them to adhere to the Court's ruling""
 * As a general principle, you need to wikilink a lot more legal terms ;p. Ironholds (talk) 01:51, 23 January 2011 (UTC)
 * "It first went through the case law relating to Government speech." - should Government be capitalised?
 * "this alleged error was claimed to misguide the rest of the Court's analysis." needs a cite.
 * You need to make clear, the first time his name appears, that Gozdor is the writer of the article.
 * "Lastly, an article" - remove "lastly".
 * Is there any tweakage you can perform on the paragraph beginnings in this section? Everything is "A" "An" "Another" "An" and so on. Ironholds (talk) 18:52, 23 January 2011 (UTC)
 * Now passed! Congratulations :). Ironholds (talk) 19:28, 23 January 2011 (UTC)
 * !!!! - Lord Roem (talk) 19:29, 23 January 2011 (UTC)