Talk:Lemon drop (cocktail)/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Wilhelmina Will (talk · contribs) 06:45, 3 January 2016 (UTC)

GA criteria
: Post followup to "Comments", the article also fully complies with grammatical policies, as well as those for layout/structure. Herein dwells the greatest dictionary ever composed! (talk) 20:30, 2 February 2016 (UTC)
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: Post followup to the suggestions in "Comments", below, the article fully checks out in terms of its use of reliable references, and application of citations. Herein dwells the greatest dictionary ever composed! (talk) 20:29, 2 February 2016 (UTC)
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: Looks like the article covers all encyclopedically relevant aspects of the subject. Nothing trivial or crufty. Herein dwells the greatest dictionary ever composed! (talk) 03:53, 2 February 2016 (UTC)
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. There's nothing in the tone of the article to suggest any sort of bias concerning the topic. Herein dwells the greatest dictionary ever composed! (talk) 03:51, 2 February 2016 (UTC) . In all near-four years of the article's existence, it has never been subjected to disruptive editing. Herein dwells the greatest dictionary ever composed! (talk) 03:43, 2 February 2016 (UTC) : All images used in the article serve an informative-illustrative purpose, and all use appropriate licensing. On a side-note, these are some very attractive photographs. Herein dwells the greatest dictionary ever composed! (talk) 03:41, 2 February 2016 (UTC)
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Comments

 * "Superfine sugar [...], which is more finely ground compared to standard granulated sugar, is sometimes used to sugar the rim of the glass." Since this sentence immediately follows one which directly refers to the process of sugaring the rim of the glass, wouldn't it be simpler to say, "Superfine sugar [...], which is more finely ground compared to standard granulated sugar, is sometimes used for this purpose"?
 * ✅ I agree with simplifying the sentence in the manner, which has been performed in the article (diff). North America1000 15:57, 2 February 2016 (UTC)


 * "The Lemon Drop was invented by Norman Jay Hobday, the founder and proprietor of Henry Africa's [...]. The drink was invented sometime in the 1970s by Hobday at Henry Africa's, and was originally served in a cocktail glass." Rather than repeating names and locations, I might recommend rewording this as "The Lemon Drop was invented by Norman Jay Hobday, the founder and proprietor of Henry Africa's [...]. He invented the drink sometime in the 1970s, originally serving it at Henry Africa's in a cocktail glass."
 * ✅ I have reworded the content as suggested above, but not verbatim. See diff. North America1000 16:02, 2 February 2016 (UTC)


 * On that line in the second paragraph of "Overview"; "Additional ingredients may also be used in the drink's preparation."... Is it possible for one of the sources in the article's list of references to be directly cited after this line? I looked through the citations in the immediately surrounding sentences, but I didn't notice any direct mentioning of this. While I'm sure the statement is true, I'd just feel better about verifying the article's compliance with references-related criteria if this were cited. Herein dwells the greatest dictionary ever composed! (talk) 04:20, 2 February 2016 (UTC)
 * ✅ See diff. North America1000 16:05, 2 February 2016 (UTC)
 * Excellent, on all three counts! Herein dwells the greatest dictionary ever composed! (talk) 20:27, 2 February 2016 (UTC)

The article now checks out. Congratulations! Herein dwells the greatest dictionary ever composed! (talk) 20:31, 2 February 2016 (UTC)