Talk:Len Davies/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: The Rambling Man (talk · contribs) 17:20, 8 March 2021 (UTC)

Comments That's it for me, on hold. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 16:55, 9 March 2021 (UTC)
 * Could link "professional" as I suggested in another similar review.
 * "in Cardiff he trained" I would put a comma after Cardiff.
 * "a reserve until " I'm not 100% sure our friends over the pond know what one of those is.
 * "During the game" match (for variety)
 * "a goal was draw" goalless?
 * "yearsater" I like it, a bit like Newspeak right?
 * "at sea.[3][1] " order.
 * "Davies began his career.." football career (you mentioned previously that trained as a marine engineer)
 * "against England" suitable link?
 * "in 1919.[1] He made" merge, that first sentence is very brief.
 * "for their tie against" ***tie klaxon*** (just reading comments on my FAC from a Canadian ice hockey fan has reminded me that "tie" means all manner of different things...)
 * "in the top tier" link English football league system?
 * " a £3,000 offer" inflate?
 * "prolific in the Welsh Cup," overlinked.
 * "missed penalty" link pen.
 * "attempt "There " probably needs some punctuation or some neat way of introducing this quote rather than just a run-on from the prose.
 * "In 1927, he was part of the.." I would move the link to the final to where you say final.
 * "his one season" maybe "only"
 * Link "kit" or people's heads will fall off.
 * I laughed at that far too much. Kosack (talk) 09:51, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
 * "Mostyn House School, Parkgate" comma after Parkgate.
 * "International goals" table is not sortable (?) so no need to relink things. If (however) you make it sortable, please relink the Home Championships each time.
 * Tables need row and col scopes.
 * Thanks for another review. I've implemented all of the changes above. Let me know what you think. Kosack (talk) 09:51, 11 March 2021 (UTC)
 * All good, so I'm promoting. Cheers. The Rambling Man (Stay alert! Control the virus! Save lives!&#33;!&#33;) 10:06, 11 March 2021 (UTC)