Talk:Leon Festinger/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Khazar2 (talk · contribs) 22:02, 4 January 2013 (UTC)

I'll be glad to take this review. I'll begin with a close readthrough of the text in the next few days, noting any initial issues on this review page, and then will start the criteria checklist. Thanks in advance for your work on this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 22:02, 4 January 2013 (UTC)

Initial readthrough
On first glance, this looks like good work, but needs some attention for neutrality and clearer sourcing.
 * "under Kurt Lewin, an important figure in modern social psychology," -- suggest cutting or revising this as peacocking per WP:PEA
 * "currently a professor" -- revise with an "as of [date]" per WP:REALTIME
 * "Indeed, Stanley Schachter," -- suggest cutting "indeed", which adds unneeded editorial emphasis
 * " Festinger’s seminal 1950 paper" -- "seminal" appears to be an unsourced peacocking term; if Festinger himself is the source for "seminal", consider clearly attributing, finding an independent source, or cutting.
 * "his highly influential paper" -- "highly influential" appears to be unsourced peacocking; cut or source per above
 * "arguably his most famous and influential contribution" -- again sourced only to Festinger
 * "Some also view this as an extension" -- is it possible to give a name or names here instead of "some"? What's the original language of the source?

I'm going to take a break here before going further to make sure this review is "live". Once you've had a chance to respond to the above, I'll be glad to continue. Thanks for your expansion to this one! -- Khazar2 (talk) 13:09, 5 January 2013 (UTC)
 * Since it's been a week without these points being addressed, I'm closing this review for inactivity, and recommending not listing this article at this time. If anyone would like to address some or all of the above, however, and renominate, please go for it! Cheers, -- Khazar2 (talk) 12:24, 12 January 2013 (UTC)