Talk:Leon Legge/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Kosack (talk · contribs) 06:44, 12 August 2020 (UTC)

Picking this one up, review coming as soon as possible. Kosack (talk) 06:44, 12 August 2020 (UTC)

Lead

 * Link captain to Captain (association football).
 * Done.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)
 * Link non-league to non-league football. As you're specifically referring to the Football League in this case, the L should be capitalised also.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)
 * "holding down a job", sounds a bit informal.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)
 * League Two is linked for a second time in the second paragraph.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)

Early career

 * Link Brentford in the first paragraph.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)

Brentford

 * Is the EFL Trophy ever referred to as the "League Trophy"? I would suggest using the full "Football League Trophy".
 * Done, Football League Trophy is better.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)
 * "Legge continued to retain his first-team status throughout the 2010–11 season and scored four goals against Exeter City, Tranmere Rovers and Charlton Athletic", no obvious source for this?
 * Done.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)
 * Same potential issue with the League Trophy title again.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)
 * "would progress their way", this sentence reads a little oddly I feel. Even dropping their way would improve it.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)

Gillingham

 * Link loan to Loan (sports).
 * Done.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)
 * Ref 31 could be moved to the end of the following sentence as it would cover both and the second is currently missing a ref.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)
 * Carlisle United already linked in the previous section.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)
 * "and earning himself a place", the use of himself here could probably be dropped as we already have him immediately before it.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)

Cambridge United

 * "thumping of Hartlepool United", thumping is too journalistic.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)

Port Vale

 * "he said that the club in an altogether better place", something missing here.
 * Done.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)

Honours

 * No ref for the Lewes trophy.
 * I removed it as a new source says his stint there was not a success.--EchetusXe 14:17, 13 August 2020 (UTC)