Talk:Leonard J. Arrington/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Midnightblueowl (talk · contribs) 19:26, 30 April 2017 (UTC)

I'll give this one a review in the coming few days. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:26, 30 April 2017 (UTC)

Prose:
 * Generally good, but could do with some tweaking in various places.

Lede:
 * The lede is probably a little lengthy for this article, and visually appears a little messy with its juxtaposition of longer and shorter paragraphs. Consider trimming down the length of the prose in the lede (for a parallel, FA-rated article on an academic that could be used as a model, see Mortimer Wheeler). Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:52, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * Your trimming down of the lede looks really good, thanks. Midnightblueowl (talk) 12:01, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "Arrington's article An Economic Interpretation of 'The Word of Wisdom' caused " - the title of an article should be in quotation marks, not italics. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:52, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "which adopted Dialogue (journal) as their " - fix this. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:52, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "were members of the LDS church"... the LDS Church? It is only later in the lede that you introduce "the Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints". Make sure everything is really nice and clean and clear; not all readers will be familiar with Mormonism and the LDS Church. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:52, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "for the The Church of " - repeating "The/the". Midnightblueowl (talk) 12:01, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * The lede uses both " 1972 to 1982" and "1972–1987". I would ensure that these are standardised (probably to "to"). Midnightblueowl (talk) 12:01, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "earnestly began many projects " - I'm not sure if "earnestly" really contributes anything here. I would scrap it. Midnightblueowl (talk) 12:03, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "for The Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints (LDS church)" - not all readers will understand that the Mormons are the adherents of the LDS Church, so perhaps a word or two to clarify that. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:07, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * We use "Brightam Young University" in paragraph two and then "BYU" in paragraph three, but do not specify that the latter is an acronym for the former. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:38, 24 June 2017 (UTC)

Early life:
 * "He grew up as an aspiring farmer and active member and one of the first"... "and... and", is a bit repetitive. How about "Growing up an aspiring farmer, he was an active member and one of the first..." Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:55, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "were devout Latter-day Saints and farmers" - there are some issues with this wording. The current phrasing could lead the reader to think that the parents were "devout" farmers as well as Latter-day Saints, which is obviously misleading. For that reason I would suggest placing "farmers" before "devout Latter-day Saints". I also think that there might be some confusion as to who Latter-day Saints are: perhaps include ("Mormoms") after referring to the denomination? Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:03, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "Rhode Island Red chickens " - does the Red need to be capitalised? And can we get a link? Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:05, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "a Union Pacific Railroad scholarship" - again, we will want a link here. Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:05, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "During the Great Depression" - also needs a link. Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:05, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "Leonard had a transcendent experience where he felt "an intimate kinship with the world" which Arrington". First, we should use "Arrington" rather than "Leonard" at the start, and then maybe "he" as a replacement for the appearance of "Arrington" later in the sentence. Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:08, 3 May 2017 (UTC)

Education
 * "Noah offered to pay for Leonard to serve and LDS mission" - try to avoid forenames; it might he better to use "Arrington's father offered to pay for him..." Also, do we have a link for "LDS mission"? The term is not going to be particularly familiar to many non-Mormon readers. Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:43, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "University of Idaho" and "World War II" could do with links. Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:54, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "University of Idaho" is wikilinked in the lead, but I linked "World War II".Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 18:13, 31 May 2017 (UTC)
 * *It is standard practice to wikilink appropriate words both in the lede and at their first appearance in the main article body, so I would definitely wikilink University of Idaho here too. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:39, 24 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Overlinking states that "Generally, a link should appear only once in an article, but if helpful for readers, a link may be repeated in infoboxes, tables, image captions, footnotes, hatnotes, and at the first occurrence after the lead." If general practice is different from the MOS, perhaps the MOS should be changed? I wikilinked University of Idaho in this section.Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 16:05, 17 July 2017 (UTC)


 * "The Brothers Karamazov" needs to be italicised. Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:54, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * " He graduated cum laude" - probably worth changing to "Arrington graduated cum laude" as the last sentence of the previous paragraph was discussing Marshall, not Arrington. Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:54, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "taught Arrington that religion and science could be compatible" - perhaps "that Christianity and science" would be more precise? Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:54, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "Army in North Africa and Italy 1942-1945" - are there links to US Army and the campaigns in question that we can stick in here? Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:54, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * I couldn't find a specific campaign he was a part of, but I did find that he worked in the Italian Institute of Statistics.Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 18:13, 31 May 2017 (UTC)


 * POW - probably better to reformat this as just "prisoner of war". Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:54, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * since it's modifying an adjective, I used dashes in the two references to prisoner of war things ("prisoner-of-war camp").Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 18:13, 31 May 2017 (UTC)


 * "Arrington had another transcendent experience" - probably better with "Arrington reported having another transcendent experience". Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:54, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "felt a heavenly calling" - perhaps this should also be reworded, forming something less explicitly emic in its terminology. Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:54, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * reworded to "reported feeling that God wanted him." hopefully that's a bit more straightforward. Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 18:13, 31 May 2017 (UTC)


 * "In World War II, he worked in the Office of Price Administration and served in the Army in North Africa and Italy 1942-1945" - three lots of "in" here. Probably worth changing the first instance to "During". Midnightblueowl (talk) 21:57, 25 May 2017 (UTC)

Academic career: *"Arrington took his notes on a typewriter and made carbon copies" - "made his notes on a typewriter and produced carbon copies"? Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:18, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "from 1946-1972" would probably read better as "from 1946 to 1972". Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:08, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "published his Great Basin Kingdom: An Economic History of the Latter-day Saints, 1830-1900, based on his" - "his... his". Probably worth changing the first instance to "Arrington's". Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:08, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "Aware of the church archives's hostility at the time to academic research," would read more smoothly if "at the time" was moved after "academic research". Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:08, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * Add a link to Rockefeller Foundation. Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:18, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "A. William Lund's policy to approve all notes taken in the archives" - could this be reworded to make it clearer. Perhaps "Lund's policy of personally approving all notes taken in the church archives"? Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:18, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * hmm. I wrote "carbon copy paper" and wikilinked to Multipart stationery.Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 18:13, 31 May 2017 (UTC)

*"America's founding fathers.Arrington" - best to use "United States" rather than the more colloquial "America"; also link to the Founding Fathers of the United States. Also, make sure that there is an appropriate space between the two sentences. Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:18, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "One of Arrington's biographers, Gary Topping, attributed some of Arrington's" - maybe replace the second appearance of the name with "his". Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:31, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "one of the significant books in Mormon history" - I don't have access to the source in question, but should this be "in Mormon history" or "on Mormon history"? 22:31, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * I was able to find a better link for the USU papers biography last week, and anyone can access it. "On" makes more sense though. Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 18:13, 31 May 2017 (UTC)


 * "Dean May and Donald Worster " - who are they and why does their opinion matter? Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:31, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * is a wikilink sufficient, or does the sentence need in-text explanation?Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 18:13, 31 May 2017 (UTC)


 * "Also in 1959, Arrington wrote an article featured in the first issue of BYU Studies entitled "An Economic Interpretation of 'The Word of Wisdom.'",[8] which argued that Brigham Young's enforcement of the Word of Wisdom as a commandment was motivated by a desire to keep cash inside Utah (and not spent on luxury imports).[9]:137" - This is quite a lengthy sentence. I would cut it in two after the name of the article. Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:40, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "From 1966-1967 he was.. From 1972-87 he was" is a bit repetitive, and yet lacks standardisation when it comes to the presentation of the years. How about "From 1966 to 1967, Arrington worked as..." and then "From 1972 to 1987 he was..." ? Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:45, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * "Brigham Young's" - link to the article about Young. Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:48, 25 May 2017 (UTC)

Historical associations: *"caused BYU studies's suspension" - "caused the suspension of BYU studies" might read more smoothly? Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:01, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "the journal was wary " - what journal is that? Best be explicit here. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:01, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "created the Western Historical Quarterly" - might work better as "founded the Western Historical Quarterly. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:01, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "He also created " - who is the he here? Arrington, or Wesley Johnson, who was mentioned in the previous sentence? Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:07, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "In 2002 he was posthumously awarded " - This whole sentence would be better placed in the "Death and legacy" section. Also, a sentence discussing 1999 should come before one discussing 2002. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:07, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * " suspension of BYU studies, BYU Studies was wary" - not sure what is going on here, so it would be good if you could reword this more clearly. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:41, 24 June 2017 (UTC)

LDS Church Historian and Church History Division: *If we are going to refer to "Apostle N. Eldon Tanner" then I think that we are going to need to explain the explicitly Mormon meaning of "apostle" here. Otherwise, scrap it for a more widely understood term. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:20, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * " Arrington conveyed publisher Knopf's interest " - bit clunky. Perhaps "Arrington conveyed the interest of his publisher Knopf," or something like that. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:20, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "When President McKay died in 1970," - no mention of McKay being President has previously been made in the article. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:20, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "When President McKay died in 1970, Joseph Fielding Smith became the next church president, leaving the church historian position vacant." This phrasing could be improved. Perhaps "After McKay died in 1970, the LDS' Church Historian Joseph Fielding Smith succeeded him as Church President. This left the position of official Church Historian—which was traditionally held by a member of the Quorum of the Twelve Apostles—vacant." Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:42, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "Arrington was appointed official Church Historian of The Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints (LDS Church) in January 1972." - we have already had the full name of the Church provided earlier in the article so we do not require a repeat of it here. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:45, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "Apostle Howard W. Hunter was chosen as the next church historian,..." Here we state that Hunter was chosen as the church historian but only a few sentences later claim that Arrington was. Were there more than one church historians? Or did Arrington succeed Hunter? This all needs to be a lot clearer. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:45, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "Arrington was appointed as "Lemuel H. Redd Professor of Western History" and Founding Director of the "Charles Redd Center for Western Studies" at Brigham Young University (BYU); his historian position was funded half by the church and half by BYU.[3]:101[14] The "Church Historian's Office" was transformed into the church's "Historical Department", and Arrington was made director of its research-oriented "History Division". " - No need for all the quotation marks, which are otherwise absent from the article when mentioning specific titles and departments. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:46, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "Richard Bushman suggested" - Who is this and why does their opinion matter? Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:20, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "the descendants of James Moyle." - perhaps "the descendants of Utah politician James Moyle."? 18:20, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "support projects Arrington deemed " - "support projects that Arrington deemed"? Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:20, 9 June 2017 (UTC)

The Story of the Latter-day Saints: *"sponsoring the writing of LDS Church histories in the academic style". This is a bit clunky. Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:41, 23 June 2017 (UTC)
 * I would stick a reference after "Among the best known works from this "New Mormon History" were two general Church histories, one aimed at LDS Church members, The Story of the Latter-day Saints, and one for interested outsiders, The Mormon Experience: A History of the Latter-day Saints.". This sentence talks about something slightly distinct from the following sentences. Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:41, 23 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "with systematic cataloging started by Joseph Fielding Smith" - maybe the systematic cataloguing... Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:41, 23 June 2017 (UTC)
 * " not subject to the church's Correlation Program" - perhaps a few words on what the Correlation Program was, as casual readers are unlikely to be familiar with it. Also, here we have "church" with a lower case c whereas it mostly appears in capitalised form elsewhere in this article. Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:41, 23 June 2017 (UTC)

Mounting resistance: *" Twelve Apostles" is linked here, but I think that we have already seen it linked previously in the article. Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:41, 23 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "a meeting with the first presidency in 1973, Harold B. Lee, then president of the church," - I'm not quite sure what is being conveyed here. Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:41, 23 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "in the Ensign" - what's the Ensign? Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:54, 23 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "Spencer W. Kimball" - who is this? Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:54, 23 June 2017 (UTC)
 * I'm not sure if the list of books works well here. For one thing it isn't really introduced in the text, it just appears at the end of the sentence. I would probably convert the list into a citation or something like that rather than including it in the main body. Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:54, 23 June 2017 (UTC)

Departure: *"The Church transferred its History Division to BYU in 1982, bringing the era of open Church Archives to a close. Working in a new Brigham Young University division" - here we have "BYU" and only in the following sentence is this introduced as "Brightam Young University". I'd make sure that the first appearance says "Brightam Young University (BYU)" and then you can use "BYU" after that. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:57, 24 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Where there are lone sentences forming discrete paragraphs, as there are here, I would merge them. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:57, 24 June 2017 (UTC)

Other writings: *"lawyer of several Hollywood celebrities" - "lawyer for several Hollywood celebrities"? Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:57, 24 June 2017 (UTC)
 * The first sentence here just does not seem to fit very well with the second. Perhaps some rejigging is in order? Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:57, 24 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "over the manuscript, to some improvement." - who claims that they were an improvement? We must be sure not to make statements like these in Wikipedia's voice. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:57, 24 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "Unfortunately" - again, this should not be in Wikipedia's voice. I'd scrap this word altogether. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:57, 24 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "gentle on David Eccles's business dealings, who engaged in fraudulent business dealings" - bit repetitive. Rewrite. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:57, 24 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "While the research in Brigham Young: American Moses was thorough and excellent," - again, this is a subjective statement and cannot be put in Wikipedia's voice. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:57, 24 June 2017 (UTC)

Death and legacy:
 * "Arrington remained an active and devoted member of The Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints throughout his life." This definitely needs a citation at the end of it, as it is thematically unrelated to the following sentences. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:57, 24 June 2017 (UTC)
 * I found a section on his religiousness in the Prince biography--he was somewhat unorthodox. I'm not sure if it merits its own section, but I can add it if you think it would be a good contribution to the page.Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 21:25, 5 July 2017 (UTC)
 * "In 2005,[22] in honor of Dr. Arrington, Utah State University created the Leonard J. Arrington Chair in Mormon History and Culture," - scrap the "in honor of Dr. Arrington", it is superfluous to the sentence and the general rule of thumb is to avoid using "Dr." and related terms. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:57, 24 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "church" and "church historian" - elsewhere the article uses capitalisation. Make sure that this is standardised throughout the entire article. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:57, 24 June 2017 (UTC)
 * I refreshed myself on the MOS:LDS, so the references to "Church Historian" are all capitalized, unless it's describing another job. references to the LDS Church are also now either "the church" or "the LDS Church."
 * "Church reps" - "Church representatives" would be more appropriate for an encyclopaedia. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:57, 24 June 2017 (UTC)
 * "12 apostles" - "Twelve Apostles" has otherwise been used throughout the article. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:57, 24 June 2017 (UTC)

Referencing *Far too many books are cited without the specific page number being given. This is a serious problem that requires attention. Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:12, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * The "Awards" sub-section is entirely unreferenced. It needs to be referenced or removed. Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:08, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * The latter parts of the "Departure" section are not referenced. Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:13, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * I'm still not sure which book you're referring to (see note below).Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 18:13, 31 May 2017 (UTC)
 * I was thinking of examples like Bitton and Arrington's Mormons and Their Historians and Bitton's "Ten Years in Camelot" essay. In various cases the book or article has been cited, but no page numbers have been given. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:56, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * What the Good article criteria are not specifically states that page numbers are only required in certain circumstances, such as when it would be difficult for the reader to find the information without the page number for a controversial statement. I put in page numbers for the Bitton article, but Mormons and Their Historians wasn't in the stacks, so I had to request it. I'll put the page number in when I can.Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 20:34, 19 June 2017 (UTC)
 * I put in the other page numbers. Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 20:15, 22 June 2017 (UTC)


 * Ideally, look into making some changes in the formatting of the citations themselves. The current system, whereby the reference information is right at the bottom of the article but the page numbers are preserved in-text is quite rare at Wikipedia and is generally avoided because of the difficulties that it presents the reader. I would strongly recommend switching to a more user-friendly form of formatting citations. Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:58, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * As this is not a specific requirement of GA itself, I would be willing to spend the time shifting the formatting of the references, unless you have a strong disagreement with such a change? Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:21, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * I don't like the Harvard reference style, because it makes users go through two clicks to see the actual source. But I also concede that having the page number in-line is not ideal. I could be convinced--is there some Wikipedia essay readily available on the subject that you recommend?Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 20:34, 19 June 2017 (UTC)
 * Unfortunately, I'm not really aware of any essays on the subject (that's not to say that they don't exist, however). If you don't care for Harvard, how about a system akin to that employed here? Midnightblueowl (talk) 22:56, 23 June 2017 (UTC)
 * I found some discussion at Template talk:Rp, so I feel like I understand the logic behind the shortened citation system. Shortened citations make it easier for the reader to focus on the article's content. But I still prefer the citation template style. I think readers should be disrupted a little by citations, so they can perhaps examine them and determine if the citations are reliable, although I believe that most readers ignore a page's references. I also like that named references have the same footnote number, which makes it easier to see if an article relies on a few texts by looking at the footnote number. I am curious though: would it be worse to just put the three or four most-used books in shortened reference style? Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 20:19, 6 July 2017 (UTC)
 * I think it would get a bit too messy if the article begins to employ different citation styles. The current citation style certainly won't prevent me from passing this as a Good Article, but I think it needs further discussion (probably on the Talk Page) after I pass this. Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:27, 11 July 2017 (UTC)

Images:
 * File:Leonard Arrington 1950s.jpeg is licensed appropriately. Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:11, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * It's a shame that we do not have further images that could be used throughout this article. For instance, we must have some free-to-use pictures of some of the universities that Arrington attended? Midnightblueowl (talk) 20:11, 3 May 2017 (UTC)
 * I doubt that File:The Story of the Latter-day Saints.jpg is sufficiently important that we could use it here, given that it is a copyrighted image. I would be rid of it. Midnightblueowl (talk) 18:11, 9 June 2017 (UTC)
 * It is a bit clunky to have two images facing each other in the "Appointment" section. I would suggest moving one of them elsewhere to prevent any such visual clustering. Midnightblueowl (talk) 19:36, 24 June 2017 (UTC)

Further reading: *There is a "full citation needed" tag on one of the entries. Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:24, 11 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Generally, there needs to be greater standardisation of these entries. Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:24, 11 July 2017 (UTC)
 * I removed this section. Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 15:59, 17 July 2017 (UTC)

, this review was posted by 3 weeks ago and you have done nothing to respond to it. If within two days no action is taken on this review, I will fail it. Display name 99 (talk) 15:44, 24 May 2017 (UTC)
 * Hi Display name 99, sorry I didn't see this before. I'm working on it right now. Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 16:13, 24 May 2017 (UTC)
 * Alright then. Best wishes. Display name 99 (talk) 16:15, 24 May 2017 (UTC)


 * Hi Midnightblueowl and thank you for the review! I'm sorry that I didn't notice it sooner. I've corrected most of the problems that you mentioned. I had a hard time deciding if the controversy over his archives belonged in the lead or not. If you think it's too long, I can take that paragraph out--I just haven't thought of any shorter way to summarize it. I added references to the sections that lacked references that you noted. I'm not sure which book citations lack page numbers. Most of the book references have page numbers immediately following their in-line citation, with the exception of one reference for Mormons and Their Historians and one for The Collected Leonard J. Arrington Mormon History Lectures.


 * I looked for some more images and added a few. The photo for The Story of the Latter-day Saints is a fair use image. I think the article's mention of the book in the Mounting Resistance sub-section justifies the use here. Please let me know if you have other suggestions for improvement. Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 20:39, 24 May 2017 (UTC)
 * Hi Rachel; could you possibly strike out each of my comments that you have dealt with, so that I know what has been done and what yet needs doing? Thanks, Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:59, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * Midnightblueowl Yes, I can do that. I'm still not sure which references need page numbers--I was under the impression that page numbers are nice but not required for GA.Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 16:16, 25 May 2017 (UTC)
 * , I think Rachel Phelps forgot to ping you in her last post. Display name 99 (talk) 13:43, 6 June 2017 (UTC)
 * , I've addressed your latest suggestions. Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 20:34, 19 June 2017 (UTC)
 * , I've made your most recent suggested edits.Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 20:19, 6 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Thanks ; just a few more points. Midnightblueowl (talk) 11:24, 11 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Hi again . I've removed the "Further Reading" section. Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 15:59, 17 July 2017 (UTC)

Thanks Rachel. This has been a lengthy GAR and although I continue to have reservations about the atypical referencing system employed, I believe that this article meets each and every one of the GA criteria. For that reason I am passing it as a Good Article. Congratulations! Midnightblueowl (talk) 17:05, 20 July 2017 (UTC)
 * Indeed. Thank you for taking the time to review it! Rachel Helps (BYU) (talk) 20:14, 20 July 2017 (UTC)