Talk:Leonardo III Tocco/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Sahaib3005 (talk · contribs) 07:11, 7 August 2021 (UTC)

It meets the GA rules. I think that it passes. Sahaib3005 (talk) 07:11, 7 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Making a quick scan of short reviews, I definitely feel like this article warrants a source review of some substance. Kingsif (talk) 13:50, 7 August 2021 (UTC)
 * , that's fine by me (the nominator). Ichthyovenator (talk) 14:31, 7 August 2021 (UTC)

New reviewer needed
I've changed the status of this nomination to "second opinion" in the hopes that a new reviewer can be found that way, since the original reviewer has withdrawn after the premature passage was reverted. A full GA review is needed, starting from scratch. Thank you. BlueMoonset (talk) 02:44, 16 August 2021 (UTC)
 * , thank you. Hopefully someone picks this up. Ichthyovenator (talk) 07:17, 16 August 2021 (UTC)
 * I'll take it up. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  17:51, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Thank you very much! :) Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

Criteria
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Discussion

 * Nicol, Donald M. is not incorporated into the text, suggest moving it from the Bibliography section to a new further reading section. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  18:01, 25 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Removed entirely given that the book is not that relevant to Leonardo III specifically unless it's used to support something. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

Prose Suggestions
Please note that almost all of these are suggestions, and can be implemented or ignored at your discretion. Any changes I deem necessary for the article to pass GA standards I will bold.

Lede

 * were conquered by the Ottomans already in 1449, in Leonardo's first year of ruling suggest removing already and changing in Leonardo's first year of ruling to in the first year of Leonardo's reign.
 * Done. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)


 * by four regents for several years to me this seemed to mean a succession of four people, whereas the body seems to say that the four ruled at the same time, suggest by a four-person regency council for several years. (link regency council if change is made.)
 * Yeah, they were regents at the same time. Done. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)


 * ensuring that Leonardo's islands became one of the most prosperous regions in Greece suggest changing to allowing Leonardo's islands to become one of the most prosperous regions in Greece
 * Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)


 * backfired catastrophically in that it alienated Venice, who did not wish to see additional Neapolitan influence in Greece suggest backfired catastrophically in that it alienated Venice, who opposed increased Neapolitan influence in Greece.
 * Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)


 * Foreseeing the futility of fighting the Ottomans don't know if foresight works best here, suggest Viewing opposition to the Ottomans as futile
 * Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)


 * with the despot ending up in considerable debt and eventually losing all the lands he had acquired man could not catch a break.
 * crushed as his house collapsed on top of him I had not read this when I wrote the earlier comment. That man must have sailed through purgatory.
 * All non-Ottoman rulers in the Balkans were quite unlucky at this time but I agree that it really is incredible just how much bad luck befell this poor man. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

Background

 * In 1411, the ruler of the town of Ioannina (and Carlo I's uncle), Esau de' Buondelmonti, who ruled with the title of 'despot', died suggest Carlo I's uncle, Esau de' Buondelmonti, who ruled the town Ioannina as despot, died in 1411.
 * Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

Accession and early reign

 * the four governors whom Carlo II had appointed to serve as regents for his son suggest the four governors whom Carlo II had appointed to form the regency council for his son.
 * Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)


 * one governor even offering to sell his island to the Venetians was this in exchange for aid, or simple profit? Would also suggest adding the name of the governor, if known. suggest with [Governor] even offering to sell his island to the Venetians in order to acquire military aid/an alliance.
 * Ostensibly in exchange for aid. The governor who attempted to seal this particular deal was whoever ruled the island of Lefkada but I don't know which of the four regents this was. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)


 * the Ottomans moved quicker suggest the Ottomans struck before an agreement could be concluded.
 * Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)


 * Ottoman conquest clear, suggest further Ottoman conquest clear,
 * Added. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)


 * and in becoming a honorary citizen of the republic suggest and in doing so became a honorary citizen of the republic.
 * Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

Staving off Ottoman conquest

 * though it was probably mainly due to the Ottomans being busy with conquering other Balkan realms during this time. suggest though it is more likely due to the Ottomans' preoccupation with the conquest of other Balkan realms during this period.
 * Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)


 * and himself according to one account being imprisoned in Corinth suggest and, according to one account, resulting in his imprisonment in Corinth
 * Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)


 * their own more or less autonomous communities suggest changing more or less to somewhat
 * Done. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)


 * The welcoming of the refugees and Ottoman attention being directed elsewhere ensured that whereas the mainland was being devastated by war, Leonardo's islands flourished in peace suggest The enthusiastic reception of refugees and lack of attention from the Ottomans ensured that even while the mainland was devastated by war, Leonardo's islands flourished in peace.
 * Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)


 * rather than just a despot or count palatine suggest rather than a mere despot or count palatine
 * Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)

Life in exile

 * had hired between the Botteghe Oscure and the Via Pellicciaria hired? Perhaps leased?
 * Yeah, they're the same word in my native language so that's where the mix-up comes from. Changed. Ichthyovenator (talk) 01:46, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Ah, I had wondered about that. I noticed also you tend to drop "of" in front of words; the sentence will still work grammatically but seems odd as a native English speaker because you just expect an "of" there. Interesting. Regardless, passing the article now. Iazyges   Consermonor   Opus meum  02:41, 30 August 2021 (UTC)
 * Yeah, I'll ascribe that to the "language barrier" as well, thank you for the review! :) Ichthyovenator (talk) 16:44, 30 August 2021 (UTC)


 * That is all of my suggestions.