Talk:Leopard-Skin Pill-Box Hat/GA1

GA Review
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Reviewer: Chiswick Chap (talk · contribs) 10:46, 20 June 2023 (UTC)

Comments

 * A delightful, thoroughly researched, and well-cited article.


 * I've fixed a few minor typographic issues.
 * Thank you. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:29, 20 June 2023 (UTC)


 * "melodically and lyrically resembles Lightnin' Hopkins's 'Automobile Blues'". The brief quotations illustrate the resemblance of the lyrics (more or less) but we're given no clue as to the nature of the melodic resemblance. We could certainly use a snippet of the main melody (as a line of sheet music) in both cases under fair use, given that this is reliably cited. Alternatively the article would benefit from a brief musicological statement about the nature of the resemblance.
 * I've looked again in sources, and come up with very little. I've added a bit about lyrics, but sources that discuss the music just note a similarity without going into any detail. Do you know any example articles that use "a snippet of the main melody (as a line of sheet music)"? (My understanding of musical theory is very shallow, so a bit of hand-holding would be very helpful.) BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 01:13, 29 June 2023 (UTC)
 * I've done so on several Carl Michael Bellman articles, for what it's worth. I don't think this can be mandated at GA so it's entirely optional, just a nice way to show what is alleged to have happened. Chiswick Chap (talk) 02:36, 29 June 2023 (UTC)


 * [30] Sydney Morning Herald states that the song is a transformation of "In the Evenin'" (after performance by Esther Phillips 1966, perhaps, if the timings are right; song by Leroy Carr, 1935). Might be worth a mention.
 * I'll check some sources for the two points above; might take a few days as I won't be able to get to the British Library 'til early next week. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 22:49, 21 June 2023 (UTC)
 * I haven't seen this connection anywhere else; however I've added to the article text, with a footnote. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 01:13, 29 June 2023 (UTC)


 * "some kind of illusion." Makes no sense as written. Dylan appears to mean "allusion" [to a named person] here: is this a typo or a mistake on his part? If this can't be answered, it might be as well to change "referred to specific people" in the next sentence to "alluded to specific people" to provide some clarity.
 * It also appears as "illusion" in Cott's Bob Dylan: The Essential Interviews (2017). I looked at a couple of sources to see if they picked up on this point, but found nothing. I've edited the quote, but happy to pursue other options if that doesn't work. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:29, 20 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Yes, that works. Chiswick Chap (talk) 03:12, 21 June 2023 (UTC)


 * The part of 'Composition and lyrical interpretation' from 'Some journalists' to 'brand new automobile.' concerns Edie Sedgwick. It would make sense to make all of this a subsection ('Possible allusion to Edie Sedgwick', or near offer), with the other two paragraphs grouped as something like 'Fashion victim'.
 * I've created subsections. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:29, 20 June 2023 (UTC)


 * Probably wikilink Eric Clapton, quote or no, as readers won't necessarily know him. He's linked in 'Live performances' but that's further on down.
 * Done. I know a later wikilink would now be allowed, but I removed that. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:29, 20 June 2023 (UTC)


 * The footnote should probably be cited.
 * Tweaked, and added two citations. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:29, 20 June 2023 (UTC)


 * Images are properly licensed.


 * Spot-checks are all fine. Amused to see in [44] that Bono actually came back on stage, having also not mugged up "Blowing in the Wind", to make up his own lyrics to that song. I guess that's a footnote or off-topic but it certainly improves the Bono story.
 * Indeed; I was highly tempted to include it here. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:29, 20 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Go on, let's have a footnote then. Chiswick Chap (talk) 07:32, 21 June 2023 (UTC)
 * Footnote added. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 01:13, 29 June 2023 (UTC)


 * Anthony Scaduto's 1971 Bob Dylan was ISBN 9780448020341, OCLC 33526791.
 * Added the ISBN. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 21:29, 20 June 2023 (UTC)


 * It would be helpful to provide a link to the lyrics of 'Automobile Blues' in 'External links'.
 * I've failed to find a link that doesn't violate WP:COPYVIOEL, I'm afraid. BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 01:13, 29 June 2023 (UTC)

I've addressed what I could, hopefully without introducing too many new issues; the point about the musical resemblance to "Automobile Blues" is perhaps the biggest outstanding item; I guess there's an argument that if it this is not in sources we don't need to expand on it, but I'm happy to make changes to benefit readers. Thanks again, BennyOnTheLoose (talk) 01:13, 29 June 2023 (UTC)


 * That's all fine, it's a great little article. Chiswick Chap (talk) 02:37, 29 June 2023 (UTC)