Talk:Leopard shark/GA1

GA Review
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OK, I will begin a review and make straightforward copyediting changes as I go. Please revert if I inadvertently change the meaning. Cheers, Casliber (talk · contribs) 08:40, 17 August 2009 (UTC)


 * An active-swimming predator, groups of leopard sharks often follow... - a singular subject, then plural - looks odd --> need to make them the same. You can be creative.
 * Changed. -- Yzx (talk) 04:12, 18 August 2009 (UTC)


 * between sharks in different parts of its range. - ditto
 * Changed. -- Yzx (talk) 04:12, 18 August 2009 (UTC)


 * There are some other examples of singular and plural in the one sentence. Generally using singular looks best as a default option unless one is talking about a group of critters.
 * Could you be more specific? Which ones? -- Yzx (talk) 04:12, 18 August 2009 (UTC)
 * I'll find some. Casliber (talk · contribs) 05:05, 18 August 2009 (UTC)


 * In the northern parts of its range, females use bays and sloughs as nursery areas, while to the south they give birth in more open areas - (s/p/p)
 * Changed. -- Yzx (talk) 21:52, 18 August 2009 (UTC)


 * Leopard sharks are wary of humans and pose almost no danger. - This sentence has bugged me, but I can't for the life of me think of a smoother way to say it.

Overall, pretty good and nearly there. Have a go at singularising some of the sharks and I'll be back later to help out. Casliber (talk · contribs) 09:47, 17 August 2009 (UTC)


 * Leopard sharks are wary of humans and pose almost no danger. - there are two problems:
 * There is an expected indirect object, as in "... pose danger to something" (in this case, 'to humans', but the repetition reads even worse than the missing object).
 * The second half of the sentence is a consequence of the first, but the bare conjunction "and" doesn't convey the causality.
 * The best I can suggest for the sentence is: Leopard sharks are wary of humans and so pose almost no danger. Sorry, that's not much help. --RexxS (talk) 16:49, 18 August 2009 (UTC)
 * Perhaps: Wary and quick to flee, leopard sharks pose almost no danger to humans.? -- Yzx (talk)


 * Nevermind, actually the last version above is probably the best. I'll leave it to you - no deal-breakers left so I figure yer over the line and the article is GA standard :) Casliber (talk · contribs) 04:20, 19 August 2009 (UTC)